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Figured I'd finally upload this myself.
Special post for my tumblr here: http://dan-vs-fim.tumblr.
>a story about Dan stuck in the world of pones
Obviously a lot of room for improvement, but at the same time I was quite lazy with most of it.
Took a few days, at least 40 hours overall.
Probably the first real sound editing I've ever done, too.
Now that had quite the twist the MLP genre.
Not to mention, quite uplifting.
Your voice acting is good too.
i agree with ProjectSJ
is that really Curtis Armstrong
Not bad at all.
I like that you went with a hand painted background initially. Made it look a lot more authentic. The sound was also probably the best part.
Regarding criticism, the characters were drawn really well, I assume from tracing. Not a bad thing considering the kinds of shows they are and what you were going for. But you should try to improve on body language and facial animations next time. Dan's mouth looked like it was trying to keep up with his voice most of the time. Kind of slow. The body language could have used more anticipation at times. Hold Dan's foot back a few frames to help the audience feel when he kicks the bed post. Try to lean his body around more when he turns his head and the like. See how far you can push those poses. It's a cartoon, and they always have to take it to the extreme. And study poses and timing in real life too. Helps you animate a sequence better.
That's about it. I'm sure most, if not all of this is something you already know considering your author comments. But the bottom line is you did a really good job and I hope you improve.
Is that you?
A short film about a park bench
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