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how to kill two birds with one stone, a guide to killing fowl with limited resources
this is my first flash and it's a simple idea i had. hopefully everything after this will be much better and more well put together.
oh, man, when that birdsey shore thing came on, i couldn't stop laughing. overall, good flash movie, could have used a bit more upbeat music. granted, the music did fit the speed of the movie itself, but that also could have been a bit faster. ETHICAL!
thank you for your kind response
The Ideas Are Funny...
...starting with the cliche of killing two birds with one stone. I liked the absurdity of taking it literally. Two pieces of criticism, which I hope are constructive: the pacing is slow. Once the audience has absorbed the idea, it's time to move on. Working with faster music would help. You might need to come up with a couple of more gags too, or your animation would be awfully short.
Second -- and this one is personal, it might not apply to everyone -- I thought the tit punch was kind of dark for something as lighthearted and surrealistic as the rest of it was. I wasn't offended (I'm damned hard to offend). It just seemed out of place.
Finally, "dynamite" is spelled like I just spelled it. That's not really criticism though, because I don't know whether you meant to misspell it or not. (That I couldn't tell might be legitimate criticism. You be the judge.)
Still, good work, especially for a first Flash.
i questioned the pacing a lot in my head. ultimately, it came down to: if it had gone much faster, it felt way too short. i should have at least done a better job of making the animations for each individual way more interesting to watch. and as far as the inappropriate tit punch goes, i feel i completely messed up how inappropriate the animation was supposed to feel. to be honest, the whole thing was supposed to be kind of dark, but wrapped in colorful, cartoony art style. like, the birds are cute, but they're being killed. in one case, the joke is a brutal murder/suicide. i'll try and do a better job of sticking to one level of inappropriate-ness. lastly, flash needs a spell check. i remember looking it up at one point to make sure i spelled it right, but i must have ignored it or something. i just uploaded a new version with correct spelling.
good for first flash
nice, when its your first!
A short film about a park bench
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