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Nov 26, 2011 | 10:53 PM EST
  • Daily 5th Place November 28, 2011

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The world is about to be destroyed. Demil Da'Monisch, an astral guide in charge of taking souls to the Other Side, and Scih Ciresta, a girl that has nothing to do with the dead ones, will go on an adventure to discover what is happening.


My first real game... or whatever.

This is a story I've been working on for a long time now. I hope you like it!
It's the first chapter only. If it's succesful enough, I will release the rest.

This chapter is long, less than an hour but a bit long.

Thank's for playing (or reading, or whatever)!



EDIT (28-nov): Next chapter will be released on December 31. You can get more information about releases and things related to my games following me on twitter (@inkainis).

(Daily 5th place!! Thanks a lot!!)

Thank You!


Things I'll add to the engine on chapter 2:
-Increase the speed of the text.
-Use of spacebar for passing the text, aswell as the mouse.
-Revised translation (although I think this one is fine).

Thanks for giving ideas!



Rated 5 / 5 stars


The story itself is great, and I like the writing style you used. A few spelling/grammar issues (in the English version), but not nearly enough to affect the readability. The graphics were very well done, I like the way characters move a bit as they "talk." Because I am a fast reader, normally, the slow scrolling speed would frustrate me, but I was so interested in the different characters and backgrounds that I didn't mind in the least. The music really added extra depth, because it changed right along with the story, really making it a full experience. I can't wait for the next chapter, and I'm really interested in finding out what makes the girl so special, why she could see you. Keep it up!

Nittram responds:

Oh, yeah! Future chapters will allow you to just click and make the text appear at once.

Thanks a lot for playing and reviewing. You'll not be dissapointed about Scih!


Rated 4.5 / 5 stars


I appreciate the amount of time you've put into visualizing your work. My only concern was those who are willing and interested in this much reading, will probably read well enough to be both insulted and frustrated by the scroll speed. If I may make a recommendation for the next chapter, please increase both the type speed and the amount of words per frame. I could barely wait to finish the chapter simply because it was not an enjoyable interface.

great writing, keep developing the plot. I bet the story is more beautiful in spanish, I wish I could have read it in that language instead. Sadly I don't speak it hah.

great job

Nittram responds:

The story is almost the same in Spanish but, well, it's the original language so some things might be lost in the translation. Nonetheless, they are pretty similar.

As I told to tkdKickChick in the comment above yours, in the next chapter I will add some functions for making text faster or appearing at once. Don't worry.

Thanks for playing and reviewing!!


Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

just one thing to note

First and foremost, you have a few grammar mistakes. Such as you forgot a word in a few lines. No big deal really.

But here's the thing. You should of ended the chapter as soon as they entered the other side, leaving the reader in complete suspense. Personally, you should scrap everything that happened when they entered the other side. And resubmit it. Because honestly, I was hooked on the story right until they entered the other side. Then I lost complete interest in it, because you were trying to add a side war story to it. And it just drug it on. Which might I add, took away from the whole point of the story, with the guide trying to get the girl out of the void.

Keep the "The Grand Finale" story, but rewrite what happens when they entered the other side. Because a side war story just ruined it for me.

Overall - 9/10
Very good writing.

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Nittram responds:

Haha, don't worry. The war thing is not a side story, everything has a meaning in the end, everything makes sense.

Thank you for playing!


Rated 5 / 5 stars

Im Not A reader But

I read THIS WHOLE thing!!

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Nittram responds:

Thank you!


Rated 4 / 5 stars

Decent story, great musci.

I did quite like the story. It wasn't too terribly deep, but nothing on newgrounds really is.

The music is very good, and It really drives the quality more than anything else.

When you make a flash submission to Newgrounds, you can choose whether you want to submit it as a movie or as a game. This is a movie.

There's an issue with the word wrapping. Since you render your words in a typewriter fashion, words toward the end of a row will begin on one line, and when they get too long, they move across the screen and 1 row down. This is distracting and confusing for some, and is a bug that needs fixing.

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Nittram responds:

The story isn't so deep now, but it will continue; I hope you keep reading it!

Thank you for finding that glich, I'm working to fix it.