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ok i know this website is MENT for artist and msuciians to share their creations with the world. but this is to sad. Why would anyone make something THIS dark. a kid killing himself due to an abusive parent is kinda deep. although it had a nice story. (not a hate comment)
If it was me who took that class I'd fail within the first hour. And you received some pretty helpful advise from it (besides the person who said you should learn to draw... they haven't seen your portraiture obviously).
Anyway, well done!
ps now u have no excuse but to work on drawings for major!!
haha actually I m the only person who did animation in the class:)
and hell no! I think I should really look for something BIG rather than just drawing...perhaps a game? :)
The art was excellent. Definitely captured the dark mood. But honestly, I couldn't enjoy it that much. My reason? There's a little 9 year old boy missing just down the road from where I live and work at. So the runaway child theme made me think of that. I'll still give you a good rating though.
Sorry to hear about that
Very nice animation....
You lose major points for having it loops. At least you had the music stop. If you haven't turned this in yet, you'd best put a stop(); in there with a replay button or yer gonna probably lose some credits.
Other than that - i thought having the kid's head be that big was kind of inappropriate for the mood. A bit comical for a bit serious thing - "Hey for feeling so small and insignificant he SURE HAS GOT A BIG HEAD" lol. but seriously - imagery is important.
I really loved the bottle rolling part. Just an excellent animation right there.
If anything else... i could say you should put it at 24fps and animate that bitch out, but i understand it's just for a class and that might take more time than you have.
Good overall - i gave it a 5.
OH yeah, and as far as the music goes - since there's poetry, i'd say stick with something instrumental. I kept thinking i was gonna hear the words in the lyrics and i think it distracted from the video a bit.
So there ya go - i figured you probably put this up before you turned it in to get some criticism, so criticism i gave. Keep it up, kid.
Actually the loop was deliberate. This work was supposed to put in a gallery context so I don't have to restart it manually. But still I admit that I have uploaded it too rush (it is due today) before any modification is done
It's not terrible
good story, just need to practice animation more.
It's time for Rifftrax...
Detective Nwar and his partner Blanche might as well investigate a water crisis.
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