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Hey I'm still kinda new to animation so any constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated!
guest starring Steve Jobs and Leonardo DiCaprio
I'm Kinda Indifferent
Interesting Idea. I thought the end part with Leo was funny. The racial remarks from Mista Apple were a little too much. BTW, I thought that Turtle was a talking cucumber for some reason.
Well that brought bavk memories...
And by memories I mean it reminded me of old-time Newgrounds animations which combined regular animation with cheesy South Park style animation. The humor also brought back nostalgia so thank you for that little trip. At the end of the day it's a well-made animation with some good old-fashioned crude humor, what's not to love amirite? So yeah, great job and keep up the good work. Also, bonus points for the song choice. lol
Thanks alot dude, Im glad you liked it
I hate to give this such a low rating, because it's obvious there was plenty of time put into it at least, and that, to me, translates to effort.
However, you asked for constructive criticism, so here goes:
Animation.... Tweening isn't everything. Frame by frame helps out immensely in places... specific spots include the beginning with the elephant creature? He was growing and shrinking for no apparent reason... it would be a simple thing to animate breathing or some other sort of idle state. Look into using onion skins to help make a frame by frame Movie Clip for your character.
The lip synching was terrible. Lets start with apple... the way this character is set up he's "ripe" for the classic type of lip synching where you just draw a different mouth position for each sound. Look up a tutorial there aren't too many different positions you'd have to make, and then all you gotta do is line it up with the right sounds. As far as the turtle goes, if you watch south park, that kind of mouth movement needs the help of the rest of the character's body to convey a bit of realism to its speech. Honestly, at your skill level, i'd just give him a mouth like apple's and call it good. Much less work to make it look decent.
So content... it was a little harsh. Cartoons like Ren & Stimpy go to extreme lengths to soften the blow of the terrible terrible things they say and do to make it funny. You aren't at that skill level so it just came out wrong. Alot of it has to do with timing... the characters talk too slow, the pace in general isn't fast enough, but camera position changes, animation styles, background, this all contributes to the making wrong funny phenomenon.
Ok, now that i'm sufficiently awake i should STFU lol
I didn't blam this, but i didn't vote high either, so good luck.
Thanks alot dude, as I said any constructive criticism is greatly appreciated in my books. I'll try and work on all those things in my next cartoon. Thanks again.
A short film about a park bench
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