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Sep 13, 2011 | 10:12 PM EDT
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This one is best with your volume up. The words to the narration are below:

My dear father died in a faraway war
Left Mother and I quite without hope
We used our last pennies to leave our fine city
And away to a house on a farm.
And on this farm, on the thorniest edge
Stood an ash tree as old as the earth
With branches so gnarled and twisted and black
That my every bone cried out to climb
"But no! Oh no!" said our funny old neighbor
Wringing her hands like two rags
"Don't you go near it, young Miss Eliza
For her roots are bad all the way down."
I thought it silly but did as she told
Until Mother went missing one eve
So sad had she been that I feared the worst
And went down to the old ash tree
And now here I stand but here there is nothing
Naught but a flowering weed
But the breeze, I could swear, carries upon it
The scent of my mother's perfume
Yes, the wind, I declare, does carry upon it
The scent of my mother's perfume

Reviews


RannRann

Rated 2 / 5 stars

Enh.

Seemed like a buildup to some story of giving in to temptation of the darkness and so on... but then turns out it's just some monster plant that will grab you if you get near enough?

Honestly, the ending feels like it was a bit lazy. As if the creator had in mind this long, slowly building tale of dark eldritch horror, but partway through said "This is a lot of work" so just had the girl get eaten for standing near the tree.

This both manages to try too hard and to not try hard enough. The hoarse whisper is overblown and the visuals are in the style of Scary Stories To Tell In The Dark but without the detail that made those truly frightening. The buildup works fairly well but winds up rushed, and the payoff is sort of a "Oh. Is that all?" kind of thing, with being so abrupt and unearned that the ending visual is just a picture rather than being truly frightening.

Needs a little more Lovecraft and a little less American McGee.


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GRgoldfishGRgoldfish

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

its a vary well rouned Flash

Good animation, Vary fitting music, good story line, and vary clear speaking. Only you lose points for not cutting out the intake of breath for the narrator. But other then that vary good gob :)



Crimson-GamerCrimson-Gamer

Rated 5 / 5 stars

Amazing!!!

Haunting and so savory!



96DEMONIC96DEMONIC

Rated 5 / 5 stars

Wow.

I love everything you post. I am a huge fan of your work and I hope to see more!



kiboy247kiboy247

Rated 5 / 5 stars

answers plz

was the people under the lod ash tree all the people who died in the faraway war