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I do stuff and things. I suck at stuff so I compensate with things.
Kudos where kudos are due.
This series is among the truly original on Newgrounds, and you deserve recognition for this. Many of the greatest series, such as XIN, TTA, Paladin, and many others besides, were purely original works, and all have entertained, and in the best cases, touched the hearts and/or sparked the imaginations of many viewers. This looks to become one of these series.
Moving on to the actual review:
Aesthetics: 10/10. You have your own unique world and have successfully portrayed both it and your characters. (I don't use Graphics/Art, as drawing ability does NOT affect the quality of the story being told, except in extreme cases.)
Plot: 9/10. There is definitely an underlying story, and the jokes and shenanigans provide excellent comic relief in appropriate doses. However, (as you yourself have stated in the first line of your description(s)), the story is occasionally difficult to follow. If one pays attention, (and is willing to roll with it until the end of each episode), then this should not be a problem, but, as I'm sure we both know, many viewers just don't have the kind of patience/savvy necessary to truly appreciate something like this (although any true otaku will applaud the way you have masterfully (albeit blatantly) used anime/video game references in your work.
Voice Acting: 7/10. The voices are well done and express emotion fairly well (which is more than a fair few can say), but can occasionally be difficult to understand. This is not an issue, as there are subtitles, but if there were not, many parts would be nearly unintelligible (whether due to the low volume of the voices, or the slightly blurry recordings of them).
Animation: 9/10. It is clear what the characters are doing, and that's really all that matters for ratings up to 7 or 8/10. The fact that this is all (as far as I can tell) frame-by-frame, knocks it up by one more point, to 9/10 (not to say that tweened animation cannot get a 10/10, just look at Xombie). The only thing that kept you from earning a perfect score on this, was that some motions appeared slightly uneven or choppy (not that badly, but still noticeable). All-in-all, the animation is well done and still gets an A.
Sound: 7/10. Getting beyond the issues present with the voice acting, the balance of the Music, Sound Effects, and Voices is way off (what this means is that one class of sounds tends to be far louder/softer than others). The voices are soft, and the music tends to be loud, while the sound effects tend to be in the middle (which is where they should be).
Originality: 10/10. This is where your movies SHINE. (Thus the whole blurb at the beginning of this wall of text). You have created a world that is entirely your own, with characters that are clearly unique. And you did it WELL. Nothing more needs to be said. Just well done.
Overall: 10/10. As I said, well done. Continue to put the work and passion into your stories, and it WILL continue to shine through.
I don't get any of the jokes and this is weird.
Wtf is happening.
I can hardly hear the voices because i turned it all down to stop myself from getting a headache from those f*cking sound effects!
^^; sorry dude...
They're going downhill. :\
The first one was good, but this one lost me.
The beginning music is awful. The doorbell sound effects need to go. The animation is good. The voices are good, but the pink girl needs to lose the accent. She's got a great voice, just not with the accent. It detracts from her character and is annoying. Normally, it's not ok to change a character mid-story, but I give you premission. It's ok. Go for it. Really. Have someone cast 'AccentGone' so she talks normally. :)
The story was good. But the characters' relationships and orientations were incredibly confusing in this episode. First they seemed married. Then no one seemed married, and they all seeemed to be going for other people. Then they all seemed gay. When the bad guy licked the blood off the slut, that was nasty. You crossed the line with that one. Not cool.
When I saw the first episode, I was looking forward to the next one. After watching this one, that's no longer the case. I hope improvement is coming.
I changed the intro. Hopefully it's not as bad...
Changing the doorbell sound effects is too much of a hassle, but I will turn the volume of them down in future episodes.
The pink girl's accent does not detract from her character and I will not be getting rid of it.
The pink girl and the orange boy are the only ones married. THe rest is all joking around. I guess that can be confusing though...
The guy who licks the blood is the villain. His action being gross is kinda the point.
A nice concept but with a flawed execution.
Incredibly loud, random sound effects really break the flow on this as well.
I have to say I never really laughed at any of the "jokes" either.
Put in some more work and make the jokes either more concise, or more visual.
I will try to turn down the sound effects, but I will not get rid of them.
I know what you mean about the jokes. I'm not that funny of a person. But I must say, jokes weren't my main priority. I was trying to establish character.
A short film about a park bench
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