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hi people , heres my second submission , with my friend linktube we succeed to make this possible ,thanks to the people of the forums for all the help and support.
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What were you going for with the art style? The shading appeared to have no light source, some of the shade colours were too dark compared to the others, and although the character shading was semi-consistent the background shading was very random. The face that the character in the blue shirt had when he pulled down his zipper was an obvious rip off of egoraptor's style. The story was pointless and was just an opportunity to mash shitty jokes together that probably took no effort to write what so ever. The whole geico thing was random and when he was stuttering to ask her out predictable. The whole thing about douchberg was never brought up again and I would have liked to see how the character in the blue and him would interact, but you were too busy making sex jokes to bother to integrate other characters I guess. The voice acting was lame and when he was talking to himself you could have added a simple echo effect, or something to spice up the boring dialogue. the bull at the end was badly put together atomically. I think if you had watched your flash over once or twice again you would find these mistakes, very quickly too. The lip sync was done poorly with about five mouth positions being stretched out of proportion which was not eye appealing what so ever. I recommend to read some flash tutorials.
Not very funny
First of all the voice acting was a bit sharp at points, and kinda hurt my ears. I would suggest recording it a bit quieter or move away from the mic a bit. The plot was very unoriginal, and the joke was old and unnecessary.
kind of lame
first off, the art style was really childish and unorginal, something you expect from fags on deviantArt. the jokes were pretty lame. it's like it came from the mind of 5th grader whose never watched any good television. timing adds to this factor as well. the voices and animation comes out real slow and kills the hilarity. i would say the only part i found somewhat amusing was the first joke where she bends over immediately demanding for sexual intercourse. oh, and one last comment, the voice actor has a terrible voice. it's really whiny.
Nothing funny about it
I can tell where it was meant to be funny and all, but it just didn't work. The animation was sloppy, lipsyncing was repetitive and could have used a lot of work, and I really didn't like the characters. Their heads looked kind of like they had melted down a little. They might look better if the neck was skinnier and more separated from the head.
Firstly: Sex Jokes? Really?
The voice acting was bad and the background distracted you from watching the actual animation. The plot was really boring and unoriginal. There are a lot of tutorial on newgrounds that could be really helpful for you.
i dont wish to see newgrounds tutorials
The return of Dr. Bees!
Goling about and preventing things.
He was working in a whip shop in Flushing, Queens...
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