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Jun 12, 2011 | 10:02 AM EDT

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Part three, and still on schedule!

I implore you to check out the prior comics first or this won't make much sense!

Previous Parts:

Part one - http://www.newgrounds.com /portal/view/566272
Part two - http://www.newgrounds.com /portal/view/568393

If you like this it may also be worthwhile to check out "Cooljaw: Darkly Dreaming" it's my first complete comic.

P.S. I will respond to all reviews (eventually), also if you want a P.M. when I release new stuff add me to your favourite authors list!

Thanks,
- Celx

Reviews


YumeSinYumeSin

Rated 5 / 5 stars

<3. . .

I like the ending the most. I can see that the story is starting to pick up a bit, and that there's bound to be some dramatic scene coming next.

I really like how the plot is starting to form, and I'm interested in what is to come.

The artwork is nice, pink, yet it contrasts the mood perfectly.

Outstanding work, my sir =)

I can't understand why this isn't front page!

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Celx-Requin responds:

"I like the ending the most. I can see that the story is starting to pick up a bit, and that there's bound to be some dramatic scene coming next."

I try to make my stories unfold in an organic manner, so I think people might be upset if they expect massive amounts of twists and turns in the upcoming comics.

Regardless, thanks for the review, and I hope you'll continue to read my submissions!
Sincerely,
- Celx


zelazonzelazon

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

Interesting

I think the music you use adds a lot to the tone of this story, because without it, the story would have been at a paradox with the colors of the backgrounds. While the tone isn't definitely my cup of tea, you definitely have an interesting way of making everything work, so definitely props to you for that.

Another thing that's definitely working in your favor is that because I haven't looked at your other works, I still get a sense of what's going on, which only the best of story can manage to do flawlessly without throwing off the person too badly, so that's definitely a plus.

The only real con I had was the arrow button in the center of the screen, since when I first looked at the screen, the arrows at the side of the screen blended in a bit too much, so you might want to have the arrows on the sides stick out a little bit more so people aren't guessing as to how to get the story to move forward (hence then 9 instead of 10...), but other then that, there's nothing else wrong with the story.

I hope this review has been help.

Zel of the Review Request Club.


Celx-Requin responds:

I might need to fix the arrow buttons on the special edition, or include a tutorial or something.

Thanks for the review!
- Celx


CoopCoop

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

Nice mood

Well, this piece, despite the pink shades that you've used for the entirety of it, is very dark, as are most of your works.

A couple of issues that I had with the writing were the line about "The Sugar Claws had been in wait" - I'd have suggested that you used "lying in wait". The second one was when you cleaved the rabbit into two halves. I'm not sure it's spelled right, being "halfs", though that might be an Americanism.

The portrayal is dark as usual and I'd dearly love you to diversify a little, because you'll end up getting typecast. My teachers always used to say that about me with how I incessantly read Discworld. Now I've branched out, I can see their points.

Still, keep wroking on this tale, it's another one of your excellent works.

What was with the API connection? Were there medals lurking in this piece?

[Review Request Club]


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Celx-Requin responds:

Hi,

There aren't any medals, the api is there because there is a ad on the very last page.

As for my stories, I don't think I'm gonna pigeon hole myself because I fund all my projects out of my pocket, even "The Sugar Claws" in comparison to "Shark", or "Cooljaw" is fairly different, in terms of the way it's written, and drawn.

If you're referring to the darker content, I guess that's just the kind of subject matter that I have interest in telling in my stories. I have done comedy, and more mainstream submissions like the "tank half full" music video, and the "dirty squirrels" cartoon.

At some point I'll work on "Cancer", which isn't really all that dark, but again not really mainstream.

Thanks for your review!
- Celx


HaggardHaggard

Rated 5 / 5 stars

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The technique of the text inside the pictures (like "funny bird" or "extinguish the flame") is very interesting and it adds a lot to the artwork.
It's still a bit hard to get used to the pink colouring scheme, but after a few panels I can appreciate all the details you worked in here.

Can't wait for the next episode to come out!

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Celx-Requin responds:

Soon, soon!

Thanks for the review!
- Celx


NekoMikaNekoMika

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

Further down the rabbit hole

This is still bizarre anyways. If she has a school she attends then there should be a store nearby? Why can't she go there instead of killing animals or does her father shun that?

The animation is nice as always since it just tends to be shades of pink providing the imagery of the story as always. The music used was rather nice and calm as usual too. The story seems to thicken with every piece made. Wonder why Maple is getting sadder in every one?

This time around she just seemed a bit demented in killing the rabbit.

Overall, further down the road in a strange story.

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Celx-Requin responds:

Maple isn't getting sadder only more stressed, it would take too much time for her to buy food, plus she has no money of her own, remember she's doing all of this in secret.

She has a hatred for rabbits, and the reason is explained in subtext as the story progresses.

Thanks,
- Celx