Not Bad
Drawing could use some work, and the music was a bit loud, kinda drowned out the dialogue, but it was pretty entertaining. I suggest getting some extra voice actors in there. Overall a good job though.
Author Comments
Hey guys! I uploaded this last week.
But accidentaly removed it from NG... So i decided to make some inprovements to the flash!
And upload it today! I hope you enjoy this short Animation!
Jochio responds:
Yea the voice acting was a problem for this episode. The original Cast couldn't do the lines at that time.
And sinds i didn't want to wait. i did them myself.. But whatever! I got a group of VA's for the upcoming episodes so that's not a problem! And the music drowning out the dialogue is indeed troublesome in my opinion... I'll fix it soon!
You improved
Your animation got better, great work. Continue like that.
Nice naruto influnce.
lolno. Animation was excellent, but shots were sometimes clichéd, and the voice acting could use some work. The real problem with this flash is that the music was often too loud to hear the dialogue. Try and get some of the community to help with acting as well.
Great work
Awesome stuff, interested in seeing it evolve.
Really great start.
You obviously spent a lot of time working on this and it really paid off. The music is fitting, and the story is fairly original (though I'm not sure how common the name Alphonse is. You might want to reconsider using a name featured in a widely known anime. There is a good chance a lot of people would notice.). Lastly, during the Prince's first appearance he scratches his head while talking to the guards. Take a close look at his hand. The thumb is on the wrong side.
I wish I could give you a 3.5, because that is genuinely what I think it deserves. I'll just round up and give you a 4. Keep up the good work.
Credits & Info
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4.16 / 5.00
- Uploaded
- Jun 7, 2011
- 4:17 PM EDT
- Genre
- Comedy - Original
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Daily 4th Place June 8, 2011