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SWAT created by FregosoMedia
By: Jorge Reyes Fregoso
Music: Tomorrow by SR-71
Edition: Luis Fregoso
a Good start
This is one of those rare flashes that come along that i see promise for, sure it may not be the best looking or the most fluid, however for a first try this is quite the suprise, and I look forward to seeing how your skills evolve over the next few years. DOnt let this possibly getting blammed hold you down, you show alot of promise.
Pros: The animation was Well done, as was the art style, There is room for improvement of course but with a bit more practice i have no doubt your animations will be something enjoyable down the line
Cons: Text placement is the one thing i think you can fix immediatly, on occasion you placed black text on Black/Dark Grey backgrounds and made it very hard to read, either change the text color or pay attention to its positioning next time. Also though the animation was very fluid, it was also very slow, speed up the frame rate next time, and keep the length of words to a minimum, Stick figures dont talk much, thats the great thing about using them as a medium, sure you can have them talk alot, but anything longer then one sentence of about 6-8 words is over doing it, you did a good job of conveying the story via the animation, which is what animations are suppose to be about, you didnt need as much text (on a side note, my spanish is very rusty at best, and i still enjoyed this animation some what, and saw alot of promise)
Look forward to seeing more from you in the future!
Thanks I really appreciate your notes.
BTW: this was an old animation I did months ago, I actually change the frames now to 24 fps :)
Hey, pretty good!
There was some interesting uses of animations in the SWAT logo dropping down and the text streaming by the van. I also liked the direction in the beginning with the 911 call, it got me invested in the story unfolding.
However, I should point out that members of a SWAT team would not have their fingers on the trigger unless they were about to shoot. While the weapon drawings were good, you should have shown the index finger straight along where the safety would be located.
I might have gone higher than 5, but sadly I don't read Spainish too well and I could only take educated guesses at the dialogue. I still got the gist of what they were saying, though, and I'm interested to find out what happens next! :) I'm also on the fence about stickman animations...
Thanks, I appreciate your comment.
I`ll try to improve my work :)
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