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it is funny, guys
Funny premise lackluster execution
As is the case with many new submission your video is lacking "snap" everything is happening much slower than it needs to
The idea is funny I think you just need more experience
The sounds were a bit bad, and the quality could be improved. Ohwait... Those two factors make it not so good. 4/10
An okay short animation. I honestly have seen worse, but this could use some work. The fart humor is okay, I get that he used a fart go get away from his nagging wife. The joke could have been delivered a bit better. I liked the visual style, but I would like to know what program you used. The visual quality is lacking at best.
You obviously have some talent, but calling yourself 'cartoonpro' is overselling yourself a bit. During the time I spent writing this review, I had to listen to the sound and voices at least 4 times before I realized it didn't stop with a replay button. If you worked on your writing a little bit, you could probably get some higher ratings, but a cool drawing style and acceptable animation will only get you so far. Work on the plot and jokes to your cartoons to make the visuals more appealing.
Well, this is kind of stupid... the voices and jokes are both childish and the sound effects are obviously made with someone's mouth. The animation is also kind of cheesy, and the first time you play through it it stops at random intervals to seemingly load itself like a YouTube video. I would suggest fixing all of these to make you live up to your username. Keep trying.
A short film about a park bench
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