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I think I echo every girl's frustration by making this video. If only my killing skills on Modern Warfare were as good as it is in the video, though...
This video originally came from my youtube channel. :D I always wanted a newgrounds account, so I thought I'd post this here. :)
Graphics came from Maplestory, story and acting by me. :D
very funny actually and sadly....that happened to me before in other game T^T
i hated her so bad but i get my revenge >:3
I used too love maple story till the "big bang" came and made the game lame, (plus the constant 13 year old kids) also i didn't really enjoy this flash that much, mostly because YOU didn't make the animations or sound effects! also the "girl beating the boy at video games" joke wasn't funny in year 2002, and it wasn't funny now! although i have to give you credit to your voice acting, it was clear and reasonable, so... 3/10 and 1/5
thats when i would say ill whoop your ass later.... in bed >_> lol
Could use some improvement.
The joke itself is fine, but you need to work on the delivery- which is where about 80% of the actual humor comes from. For example, the moment you see her walk to her house, you know exactly what the joke is going to be, which is premature- if you had just have her walk off-stage instead of cutting to her house, it would of turned a "Heh, I guess that's kinda clever" joke to a "lol!" joke. Unpredictability is where humor COMES from, and any unnessisary hints as to whats coming will only ever hurt the joke, not enhance it.
Likewise, every joke needs a concise ending- nothing quite ruins a joke like when it overstays its welcome... which this joke does. You either needed to end after she tells him over the game that it's her (and his friend comments on it) or you needed to remove that bit and just have her hint at it during the date itself. This stuff matters.
I don't know if you got some guys to voice the boys, but if you did, they need the axe. There's a difference between giving the guy an awkward personality and the line's being delivered awkwardly, and the former can't substitute the latter. The girls's voice, presumably yours, is fine, though- remember that in humor, though, its better to exaggerate personalities than to minimize them. Just... saying.
You did a good job with the sprites, though. They showed the exaggeration the voices should of had: but when contrasted to the tamer voices, it did come off as a little... off. It was distracting, because I was relying more on their expressions then their voices.
It wasn't horrible flash by any means: there are enough small problems within it that it's sufficiently hampered by them... but its salvageable. I hope you take this advice to heart for your next cartoon.
done with maplestory and awesome! I wanna ask, wich program you used to do it? just for trying :P
A look at the first day of Lucina in Super Smash
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