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*Update* Holy crap guys, 3.56?! :D That's my best score so far, thanks!
Well this took awhile to write, and it actually has nothing to do with Mario, but I used the sprites from it so I guess that counts for something :P.
Constructive criticism is greatly appreciated.
Awesome guy is by Psycosis91
and Pokemon Tower Defense is by Olmate
*If you watch the movie it will all make since.
Also I know that the writing is really corny.
*Update* Here's the better version on youtube (http://www.youtube.com/w atch?v=XxoDR4u_c3Y)
Could use some work
It's funny, for sure. That "I WILL DEVOUR YOUR SKULL" line really cracked me up, since it was such a good random threat. But you misspelled a few words, like "chef" as "chief", "thief" as "theif", and you messed up your "too"s and your "to"s. Too is like too much, and to is more like I'm going to.
But you should definitely continue this, it could be really great!
Ahhh no way. I thought for sure I had fixed all of the spelling errors. In past movies I've made there wasn't really any plot, it was mostly random gags haha, I guess that still shows in my later works.
Paper mario is legit
The writing was pretty terrible. I didnt laugh at all, if it was supposed to be funny.
But you still manged to entertain me with great paper mario sprites and sounds...enough for me to watch the whole thing.
I was kind of hoping for an explanation for why they thought he was a thief and what he did, and why the shy guy is so awesome at everything, and why you chose the forest guy as the bad guy, and explain where they were in the paper mario world, etc...
If you continue with this and make a series out of it, i recommend better writing. you need a better story, plot and script.
but the sprites, sound, graphics, style, etc were all good!
It uh, was kinda supposed to be. But I guess I can't make everyone laugh. I guess I did my job if you still liked it. I left stuff out so it would leave you wondering and maybe want to watch the next but I probably left out too much :/. I'll rework my ideas and see what I can do.
Keep it up, I like these kinds of flashes.
I'll try hopefully you'll like the 2nd as much as the first :D.
I must say, I like your style.
It really fits Paper Mario and I thought it was funny.
The animation is most entertaining too. Very neat and fluent. Nothin over the top.
However, if you rate this "E" as in Everyone, keep the swearing away. lol
I hope, you do more.
Oh haha I completely forgot about the swearing. I've never been a fan of animating huge fight scenes, if the situation doesn't call for it. Thanks for the review!
It was cool!
I liked it. You've got some funny lines in here. Are you going to make more? If so, I'd say fix the sound quality for the music. Tgat's all really, other than that. It was cool.
I'm thinking of writing the script for the 2nd this week, but I can try and make the sounds better because this one was just compressed to much :c.
I also just put a better version up on my profile if you wanna check that one out.
A story about a dog!
this art teacher is WHACK!!!!
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