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I really have nothing to say about this. Just watch it.
I didn't laugh. So I presume it wasn't meant to be funny. I wasn't amazed, therefore I am guessing you weren't going for a quality animation. The audio was awful. Try and avoid eating the microphone (that's what I thought I heard).
However, it was original. So that's the silver lining on this particular cloud.
You're going to be rated extremely critically from the very beginning because this made front page - so brace yourself for that. Realistically, I have to agree with everyone else: this simply isn't front page material.. The point of this story was that there was a hair in the guy's eye. It was short, the dialogue was awkward, it was gross but not gross enough, and it wasn't as funny as it was trying to be..
Next time, I'd suggest that you go longer, have the guy be a little less calm about the fact that he just pulled his eye out.. (I mean, whoever did the voice didn't match the sense of urgency being expressed by the animation), and put in a bit more of a twist.. I think everyone saw that coming.
And, not that I'm a fan of gratuitous violence and gore, but had he gotten his eye ripped out, there'd be a bit more blood. And since his eye is out, it isn't like there isn't already a substantial amount of gore in it.
that was terrible. honestly, i expected that to happen, and the credits almost lasted longer than the actual video. you just looped segments for the pulling of the hair.
there was no humor in this at all, and it seemed incredibly vulgar in its entirety.
there is grotesque violence on newgrounds, like in madness combat. but madness combat has style. you don't.
I gave this a chance hoping it would be a bit longer and perhaps a bit funnier. It wasn't. It was too short, the animation was rushed, the pun was only mildly amusing, and the whole ordeal, small as it was, is forgettable.
Please take a little more time to really churn out something worth watching- especially considering this made front page for no apparent reason.
A look at the first day of Lucina in Super Smash
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