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An isolated man and his dog discover the horrors that lurk in the forests of the frozen north
Number 1: despite a good build-up (which I will address more below), the story got weaker and more predictable as the ending neared. And that's the first issue I had. Despite the fine storycraft in the first half of the flash, I could see the ending coming a mile away. I found myself enjoying the build-up less and less and wasn't even let down by the "left field" ending because by then, I was already expecting something incredulous. I won't spoil the ending for those who haven't viewed the flash, but it's a letdown in an M. Night Shammalammadingdong way.
Number 2: there was such find attention paid to the artistic detail of the flash that you left plot holes big enough to drive a truck through. Why would an ice fishing hut need a refrigerator? And where is the electrical generator needed to provide electricity? No electric company is going to run an electric line to the middle of a lake. Why a land telephone line? And where is the telephone pole to the middle of the lake to make such an impossibility possible? And how is he able to get a television signal in such a remote location, especially in the age of digital television? Why did the visitors to his cabin leave no footprints, when he and his dog left footprints? Also pertaining to remote locations, how is it that the road is completely clear of snow the day after a snowstorm? I live on the outskirts of an urban area and sometimes it takes 2-3 days for snow to be cleared. I also live part-time in a rural area, and a road as remote as the one you depict will never get cleared at all, until the snow melts in April. It is small lapses in logic and inconsistencies like this that detracted from the overall storytelling and actually took me from a state of suspense to a state of skeptical laughter.
Because the flash is so near techically perfect, and the artwork is about the best you will ever find on NG, I can't go below a 8. But because the ending was telegraphed and weak compared to the rest of the flash, and there were too many plot holes, I can't do anything higher than an 8.
Should of spent some time on the ending
Amazing flash. One of the best I have ever seen. But the ending just sucked. I hate endings where I'm like, "WTF just happened?"
All in all though... you need to make more. You have amazing talent and are going to go really far if you haven't already! :)
I actually got emotional when the dog was mutilated. My jaw dropped at the ending. I DID NOT expect that. I almost wish there was more alternate endings or something more. What if it was ZOMBIES? or NUNS? AAAAAHHHHHHHH!!!
Excellent work and ideas. I look forward for more!!
I loved the retro art style that you used, even if its a bit out of place. the animation takes its time to be imersive but it crawls into your skin once it does. the ending is great, one thing is to see your dog dead and another is to see it choped in half, its just sick(in the amusing kind of way) and the furries just added a WTT to the climax, its like getting killed by a sacary puffball, its cute, but you are still getting killed.
Good job mate
really ridiculously good
In particular, your audio was amazing. And that goes a long way in creating suspense. Really well done.
Bring a buddy.
Yugi and Kaiba have a duel to the death!
A sinister deal is underway in the underbelly of Neon City
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