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Jan 31, 2011 | 3:27 AM EST

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I started this animation about 1.5 years ago, my first animation.

At first it was getting done quite fast, but after a while ideas ran dry, which slowed me down until eventually I stopped working on it all together. Recently I made a few adjustments and uploaded it here.
It's not as long as I formerly hoped it would be. I removed several scenes too. I couldn't get the preloader working.

Feedback is very appreciated.

Reviews


MrRandomistMrRandomist

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

pretty amazing for a first

i really enjoyed it, and its pretty amazing for a first animation, great work.
the music was very atmospheric and really brought the flash together to bring that emotion forward. although for next time i thought your ideas where a bit lacking and a nice story to go with it would have been nice. i didnt exactly know what you where trying to communicate.


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demsis responds:

It wasn't really a story at all, so I can't say how I was trying to communicate anything.
Yea, I couldn't have got a betting fitting song.
If there is a next time, i'd make sure that the animation is always under the shadow of the story.

Thankyou!


mooby1mooby1

Rated 1 / 5 stars

not for newgrounds

you ned to get better at animating... the are music and concept are fine but the animation drags it down.


demsis responds:

Yes, I do need to get better...
Thanks for your feedback.


badassdude1234badassdude1234

Rated 4 / 5 stars

Well this is nice

I have to apologize though as I cannot fully grasp what you were trying to convey, but the animation was impressive so you get high points for that keep improving, and here is hoping to your next work to be more amazing than the last.


demsis responds:

Yeah, I'm not surprised you didn't understand. It's more an abstract collection of scenes that don't go in any particular order. - Something I don't plan on doing again.
Impressive animation? wow.

Thanks for the feed back.


RammerRammer

Rated 2 / 5 stars

trite, but otherwise not bad.

artistically-speaking, this movie is decent. nothing stands out as incredible, but nothing stands out as awful either. the animation, aside from tweens, could've used some work. are you using onion skinning? it's a very helpful tool that helps you keep track of what your previous frames looked like. the tear drop in particular could've used some work; it looked like a viscous blob rather than a droplet of water.

moving onto the subject matter, it just seemed cliché. i get that it's a depressing flash, but the kid sitting in a corner crying? come on, you could've probably thought of a more creative way to represent depression. the bleeding wrists seemed out-of-place, as did the person laying in the grass. the movie seemed cohesive at first but after the wrist bit, it just seemed to jump around in time and i actually got confused.

maybe i'm thinking too deeply into this. but anyway, i gave you a 3. the movie isn't bad, but certain parts of it like the frame-by-frame animation and the story could be improved.


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demsis responds:

Yeah I know what you mean... about the, well the lack of regular frame-by-frame animation. At the time when the majority of this video was made, I probably compensated for the lack of frame-by-frame skills by using tweens. Obviously the droplet of water is one of the worst animations.

As for the subject matter; I agree with you. I can see how in some ways I almost find seeing this boring, because the creativity is bland and the story - abstract. And a lot of the scenes were fairly cheap so I just mass deleted them, most of the scenes were cheap.

Next time (if there is one), there's going to be a proper story, and a decent one too. For the past while I realise that it's much better to spend ages thinking of a good story and then animating it rather than jumping into an animation without a story.

Thanks for your helpful review!


kazewindsakazewindsa

Rated 4 / 5 stars

Nice music :)

... although the animation still need improvement, but overall it's an nice art flash.


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demsis responds:

Yes, I need to improve. Thankyou.