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Jan 29, 2011 | 11:20 PM EST

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this is an animation that i have been working on for a while. let e know what you think

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littlegonkyboylittlegonkyboy

Rated 3 / 5 stars

not bad

not bad, but short



87392V87392V

Rated 2 / 5 stars

Good first try

I like these kind of shorts. I like your music choice and sound effects. However, you need to zoom in! Let us focus on one, maybe two guys at once. I would be watching blue head and it would go into slow-mo, so I'm like, "Stuff's going down!"
Then I catch red head finishing a cool move out of the corner of my eye and think, "Oh, dang it."

You have a solid first draft here.

Also, the characters look more acrobatic if they are better-proportioned. Make their knees bend when they jump and run to better emphasize their strength. You can see the knees bend better i their legs are longer!



icecoolkidicecoolkid

Rated 2.5 / 5 stars

its cool

every thing was pretty good for your first one so yeah i think its your first one anyway i liked the way your sticks looked so yeah



jessepinwheeljessepinwheel

Rated 1 / 5 stars

No.

First things first. Use stream, not event. It's under sound settings.

Second, if you're going to use a song, please have a reason for it. Don't just throw it in just because. The same thing goes for slow motion. Don't just throw it in. Have a point.

Also, Protip: when you're animating fights, only make it so that one thing is happening at a time. I watched the whole thing and I had no clue what was happening and when it was done, I didn't care at all. If there are too many things going on at a time, then no one's going to see what's supposed to happen.

I appreciate the fact that this probably took a while to make, but you need to practice a bit more. It's certainly not terrible, but frankly, it's not very good, either. I think that my main issue was that I had no clue what was happening, though your animation does need some work. I guess that I'm just telling you that you should practice more in general.



mifdsammifdsam

Rated 0 / 5 stars

Why did you submit this twice?

Don't spam the portal


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xtremehaggard responds:

if you would have read the first one some script went wrong. and the start button stayed. thanks and dont leave reviews like this unless you mean to be a complete dick.