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this is an animation that i have been working on for a while. let e know what you think
not bad, but short
Good first try
I like these kind of shorts. I like your music choice and sound effects. However, you need to zoom in! Let us focus on one, maybe two guys at once. I would be watching blue head and it would go into slow-mo, so I'm like, "Stuff's going down!"
Then I catch red head finishing a cool move out of the corner of my eye and think, "Oh, dang it."
You have a solid first draft here.
Also, the characters look more acrobatic if they are better-proportioned. Make their knees bend when they jump and run to better emphasize their strength. You can see the knees bend better i their legs are longer!
every thing was pretty good for your first one so yeah i think its your first one anyway i liked the way your sticks looked so yeah
First things first. Use stream, not event. It's under sound settings.
Second, if you're going to use a song, please have a reason for it. Don't just throw it in just because. The same thing goes for slow motion. Don't just throw it in. Have a point.
Also, Protip: when you're animating fights, only make it so that one thing is happening at a time. I watched the whole thing and I had no clue what was happening and when it was done, I didn't care at all. If there are too many things going on at a time, then no one's going to see what's supposed to happen.
I appreciate the fact that this probably took a while to make, but you need to practice a bit more. It's certainly not terrible, but frankly, it's not very good, either. I think that my main issue was that I had no clue what was happening, though your animation does need some work. I guess that I'm just telling you that you should practice more in general.
Why did you submit this twice?
Don't spam the portal
if you would have read the first one some script went wrong. and the start button stayed. thanks and dont leave reviews like this unless you mean to be a complete dick.
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