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No offensive reviews but please tell me things i need to work on. Enjoy
LOL @ the revolver
well ill count this as a experimental. the things you need to work on has already been said but i havta say the revolver had me laughing till i droped my laptop. it looks like u pumped it up with air then poked a hole in it. i can see that with a little work and some of the ideas posted by others this could be much better.
in a few stuff.
need to do a better draw, use a litle more functions of flash, not only animation, less anime, and a plot, and that's it.
What do you need to work on?
To be honest, everything.
Most important, and mainly the only things in here are graphics and motion.
Both are shit. The outline is too thick, and the details are very bad drawn. The revolver doesn't look like revolver at all. There's too many black on the drawings.
I'm having a feeling that you redrawn some of it.
An honest opinion.
The art could use some improvement. I thought the flash was fine, but there were a few moments where the art confused me; so the art could use improvement (The bandanna and the gun were very sloppy).
sorry but its pretty bad dude
Constructive criticism. 1. Add a preloader. 2. Add a play button. 3. Draw better characters, just smooth them out a bit. 4. Make the movie stop. Instead of just looping. 5. Maybe add some western stlye background music or sound. Hope that helps.
next time ill try put more effort in and thanks for your advice.
Second-Year Animation Film (2015)
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