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Jan 26, 2011 | 7:38 AM EST

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This is my very first flash animation. I've only been workin in flash for a few months so Im still learnin as I go. I appreciate any critique over my animation so I know what I can improve on. Thanks!

edit: Yes I know the story was confusing and hard to understand. It was mainly just suppose to be a short. Sorry for that but yes I will aim to improve.

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babiesanchellbabiesanchell

Rated 5 / 5 stars August 15, 2012

this is a gteat movie



JingoJoe14JingoJoe14

Rated 5 / 5 stars January 26, 2011

My God...

When I first finished watching your animation, I had to stop everything for a moment. I got out of my seat and stared out my window for the longest time, trying to find meaning in my life. It was then, after taking off my glasses, that I cried. The sheer beauty of your animation had moved me to tears, and I no longer had control over my emotions. As I wept I realized that anything I could ever do in my life would not amount to even an iota of the perfection you have uploaded today.

I award you a 10/10, and I hope to see you continue your work into the future.


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XwaynecoltXXwaynecoltX

Rated 4 / 5 stars January 26, 2011

Good quality

~~REVIEW~~
Nice work here this really starts off great with the {CITY-VIEW} and the animation was smooth, your {CHARACTER} work was awsome aswell very nice detail from facial expressions, to the action you had going on, one thing might be to have more animation from your characters {LIMBS} will give it more of a realistic style, your flash was really good decent quality, i thought it was kind of on the {SHORT} side though, you have good effort and skills here but you should add too it more, would love to see more {STORY} more action from the characters and like i said give the characters more realistic moves like more limb animations, but other then that its a very good flash and i look forward to seeing more from you, so untill then good luck and welcome to newgrounds.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
More limb animation so the characters have more of a realistic movment, making the story longer add more content and overall longer

~~OVERALL~~
Decent flash good quality entertaining story, could use more to it though.

~X~


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SirUndeadSirUndead

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars January 26, 2011

Righteous

Good stuff, your art and animation is solid, especially considering this is your first animation.

My tip? You need good voice actors. You can easily find some in the audio forum by posting in the "Voice Actor Wanted" thread, or you could even use me if you wanted. Most of the voice actors will work for free and are just glad to get exposure.



VashthespearmanVashthespearman

Rated 3 / 5 stars January 26, 2011

I like it

If this is your first animation damn you got more patients than most people who start out, im very impressed, word of advice though try to grab your audience in, maybe with a nice joke if it's a comedy, I mean it really seemed to draw out and it didn't seem to have any substance to it, nothing held it well to my eyes. So try to go out of the box and pull us into something awsome

but oh yeah for a first flash you are very very promising. I cant wait to see what your 2nd one will be, and who knows maybe your 10th

so keep going, dont give up just keep on truckin


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