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doodle on a crap day
to be honest its kinda good but voices and grafichs are crappy .dont ged mad if i attempt to do an animation it wuld look like a crap going out of home and dying.
should stop when you are behind
i think you should review your work before you put it up in the portal or at least have someone help you with your flashes so it don't look like a 5 year old did the flash
Needs a lot of work
There is the beginning of a plot here, so I nearly gave in and gave you a star for this, though that would probably be a little too generous.
The animation is that awful that you really do need to go back to animating school and learn how to do someone on a swing - rotate the image where the swing is swinging, as opposed to just turning the picture from the centre. Try to keep the ropes going off screen at the top, or better yet, build the swing frame and have the whole thing in view.
On top of that, the sound is awful - if you're going to give us a high-pitched sound file like that, try turning the volume down slightly and then also supplying subtitles. With a little more effort, this could be so much better.
As for the writing, you've got the start of a plot, but you're making it far too short - you cna't get into the piece and relate to the character at all (at least Foamy the Squirrel has something to say), so it does fall apart a little.
I'd also advise that you use backgrounds. Yes, you've worked a little on the presence of something in the foreground of your works and with that in mind, the background needs to get something more there, as opposed to plain white. Just a few generic ones that you switch between scenes would be an improvement for now and every time you draw one, you can save it for use in other projects, saving time in the long run.
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Dude, I know you're trying but seriously?
I don't know why you thought this was worth posting, but really, you've got to do better. Frankly, your drawing skills suck. Your animation skill isn't much better. If you are terribly lazy or just felt like posting something, it doesn't matter, GO AND PRACTICE. If you don't have Flash then you shouldn't use Paint to make up for it. I started out using Pivot Stick Animator when I began animating; I suggest to try and do that too.
About the animation itself; I don't even know what the storyboard is; my ears bled because of the voices. Your probably digitally changing your voice; please don't. I can't stand it. The animating is not existent, you just moved a bunch of characters around and drew some really crappy figures.
One again, please practice more. Even stick figures are better than this. You should make sure your entry is worth it before submitting it.
I'm sorry but I gotta be honest. The voice work was TERRIBLE. While hearing this annoying voice not only didin't I understand what the hell he was saying and it really did hurt my ears. The visual presentation is awful as well. Theres no background, and Its made on paint, which is bullshit. The animation looked strange. There's no walking or talking animation, so the characters look realy stupid while doing these things. The story is stupid as well (judging from what little of what I could understand of it), what you wanted the story to be is something completely uninteresting to the viewer. There are too many problems with this flash and the overall thing seemed rushed.
A starving village ask a water spirit to help them.
Strawberry clock forgets his ticket on the train but maybe he'll be ok
a clock day story
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