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Dec 21, 2010 | 4:16 AM EST

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I crave feedback, i really need some tips on how i can improve, apart from my graphics coz i was using a mouse for this. I would love it if someone could direct me to a few good tutorials about animation. Thx

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XwaynecoltXXwaynecoltX

Rated 2.5 / 5 stars December 21, 2010

Can be better with practice

~~REVIEW~~
This was not a bad start, the animation was a bit {CHOPPY} the music was good and seemed more like a music video, the {ANIMATION} seemed kinda slow and choppy as said before, but these things can be improved easily, and you asked about some tutorials, all you have to do is do a search in the forums, or even go the the flash forums, there are alot of tips there to help improve on stuff, with your animation just needs some smoother animation, more use of the backround and more stuff going on, you have it right with the idea, and characters but you may want to fine tune those, also i noticed the {CONTINUE-BUTTON} didnt seem to want to work, thats another issue you may want to look into, and while we are on buttons you may want to make a more bigger and standoutish buttion, and more color use, anyways hope this helps you in making improved creations, anyways good luck.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
A few things that could be improved on would be better working buttons, improved animation and a smoother feel, i suggested some help tips and how to find them on the forums.

~~OVERALL~~
Cute but still needs improvments

~X~


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AmeatureFilms responds:

thx, but i found out why the btn doesnt work, in my action script i said to go to and play "scene1" but i had changed the scene name to killed, that is y.

Thx for the useful help


donnieriskdonnierisk

Rated 3 / 5 stars December 21, 2010

Hmm...

Not bad if this was your first time. The story didn't really make sense to me. It doesn't look like a lot of time was spent on it.

The animation and art itself can be improved by using more tools flash has to offer, I noticed that you used the brush tool a lot. You don't have to be a good artist to have good art, I use a mouse too and if you combine the tools flash gives you, you could create almost anything and it will look good (don't look at my animation its a poor example of it).

All I can say is keep practicing and try to spend as much time as possible on every scene, even the small details make a difference. Make an effort to bring the artwork to life, for instance the blink of an eye or shadows, things that you see in real life.

Here's a link to newgrounds tutorials, check through them if you haven't already:

http://www.newgrounds.com/wiki/creato r-resources/tutorials

Google is also useful for tutorials even though it can be time consuming and tedious sometimes to find what you want.

Hope I helped a bit, you have potential, nice song choice, best advice I can give is just keep animating!



scrumpyjack123scrumpyjack123

Rated 3 / 5 stars December 21, 2010

Not at all bad

Apart from the annoying music, the animation wasn't bad. As for help, I'd try the forums (BBS).



Skate-or-die-619Skate-or-die-619

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars December 21, 2010

nice concept

good movie, only tips i can really give is keep practicing, you have nice origanal idea. Also try to learn to be critical of your own work ( not overly critcal like me coz thats the main reason i have no flash uploaded )