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This is for Symphoria on dA
Hard to understand.
Perhaps if you took some effort to animate it rather than post a storyboard, it would be worthwhile. As it stands, this COULD (with proper animation and a more complete context surrounding the story) be a very good flash.
Please add in a "0_loop" and a play agian button at the end and lengthen the time that you read the note.
didnt get it
couldn't make anything out of pictures
had so much potential...
The story was interesting, but toward the end you drifted off into nonsense (adding a handwritten "lol" within any animation seems like a kiss of death unless the movie is intended as a comedy...). You don't have a break in your film, so when it begins again, the music also restarts, creating a double piano concerto to overlap. As some have said, your pictures are a bit difficult to interpret, and it seems like a color adaptation once in awhile (like red for the blood) would have helped to strengthen moments or at least give more detail.
As for the story, I BELIEVE that you were interpreting a woman and man meeting, falling in love, he dies, and then she...is left with their child, who ultimately goes to live with a billionaire instead of staying with her? See, that's where things get foggy, and your images don't really help. Perhaps more detail to the images or a stronger conclusion would make this work even better.
Honestly, if this was revised, this has the potential to be an award winner. The music is perfect for the subject matter, the story is classic (until the ending, at least), and there's nothing "adult" about this anyway. A revision would truly make this stand out...
could be better!!
fix drawings up and clean them but i like the art style.
oh, and it just loops and then the musics a mess and stuff.
other than that, good music choice and general story (missed some of it)
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