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Hello everyone, I've been lurking the site for some time now and decided to finally join and hopefully upload some flash abominations of my own.
So this is my first upload, and my 3rd flash animation.
This was made for a school assignment. It turned out to be quite a time sink for me, hopefully i'll improve in speed and quality with practice.
I am very much open to advice and criticism, so please, dump some text :)
This was very mediocre, in that it seemed to have equally good and bad things about it. The bad parts were that there was so little that happened and it needed more of a story/punchline. The good parts are that the animation is actually really good. I was expecting something dumb when I saw this, but was actually a little surprised. Next time, you should work on making it longer with more going on. I will say that it seems as though you got the animation part down just where you need it.
I also felt, when i finished and looked at the thing as a whole, that everything went far too quick and nothing really interesting hapenned, but i didn't feel like going back and revising everything.
Next time, the plot will be given more thought and be written down before i start animating!
Thank you for the input :)
That is one creepy fucking bird.
BTW love the sound effects.
I actually had a lot of fun mouthing these sound effects, even though they were recorded in a hurry and the quality is poor (especially the grey guy laughing - i hate the sound of his laugh btw :D).
Still thanks for the compliment and input.
For a Beginner
Not Bad. But there is alot of stuff you need to fix, like the speed and that(Like you said). And in the future i hope to see more work from you ;)
I hope i start dishing out some new stuff soon, too!
Nice, but short...
Hey, nice job for your 3rd flash. Your movie wasn't bad, but it needed a lot of improvement.
First: You need to find sound FX! Your mouth sounded very, very cheesy.
Second: Work on timing. The bird snoring took up too much time and the squirrel thing laughing and getting his egg took too long as well.
Third: Give your movie a plot. Make it longer. This sort of short seemed very unoriginal.
I did enjoy your art. It was a little rough, but I can tell that with practice you'll be able to build it up. Keep workin' at flash and be creative!
The horrific sound effects are going to be replaced by actual ones in future submissions, atleast i'll try :)
About the plot, i totally agree and the only reason this came out as it did, story-wise,
is that i made up what was next as i animated, i think for the next flash i'll write down my thoughts, maybe even try to think of the camera shots, then work based on that.
Thank you for the response!
this is good.
Not only is it a great start but it's a good flash animation.
keep it up.
this cite needs more like this.
Thanks, I appreciate it :)
Pilot for my new show!
A story about a worm, a beetle and a very hungry bird…
New video for you to watch, while we wait for the next plague to happen...
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