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Dec 16, 2010 | 7:42 PM EST

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This was supposed to get done in like early September but procrastination got its way once again. I managed to crapscrap the rest of it together just in time for Christmas. I hope you all have a wonderful whatever-the-heck-you-cel ebrate-this-time-of-year.

for the review crew, I would ask that you include these points, as well as any other comments you may have:

-animation quality (are the movements even a little realistic?)
-graphic quality (how well I draw characters, backgrounds, etc.)
-story (if you could include some example of what you'd like to see out of me, that'd be great.)
-level of coherence (do you actually know what's going on?)
-comedic timing

P.S. I've been searching for collaborators for a while now, so if you like what you see, I'd love to be a portal buddy of yours.

P.P.S. Crapscrap- v. To heap together in a sloppy manner.

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Edit: Fixed the play button. Now you can actually find a valid reason to vote zero!

Reviews


Assassin625Assassin625

Rated 5 / 5 stars

fig newton of imagination..?



EFGStudiosEFGStudios

Rated 4 / 5 stars

Hi Jerrod,

Just saw your video today and wanted to comment on it per your instructions. I hope my response isn't too obscure to understand.

-animation quality (are the movements even a little realistic?)
"A Bit. A Bit." - Monty Python and the Holy Grail.
(I liked the opening-jaw movement as Jerrod hears the Newton introduce himself. ((I know he's just a "fig"ment of the imagination but may one suggest if he's going to wear a top hat, rename him Duke as in Duke Newton. (cheesy-yet-clever dual homage to the old computer game.)

-graphic quality (how well I draw characters, backgrounds, etc.) For a first time, not so bad at all. In the future, be more careful with your continuity (seems Duke Newton's body changed size when his chair shrank. His hat should have stuck out more over the top of the smaller chair.)

-story (if you could include some example of what you'd like to see out of me, that'd be great.) That's tricky. Story-telling is not the same as story-writing is not the same as story-animating. Well- you've mentioned procrastination. I'd like to see you do a "self-portrait" piece identifying the causes of your procrastination as "villains" so you can have Jerrod beat the villains. If you want some other story to animate, do something with action and romance.

-level of coherence (do you actually know what's going on?) Wasn't hard to follow.

-comedic timing - I got the jokes and actually did laugh. Don't worry about your comedic timing.

Audio suggestions- more Foley (sound effects). pay closer attention to important details like the doorbell. You gave us a close-up of a doorbell, but no sound to compliment the close-up. *ahem*...

That's all for this review.
Stay tuned next time! :)
EFG


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kablammerzkablammerz

Rated 5 / 5 stars

OMFG SHAFDAWG POSTED A REVIEW =D but anyways,BLOODY BRILLIANT VIDEO =D



naliyanaliya

Rated 0.5 / 5 stars

dont like it... sorry
+ the mic is too quiet


JerrodStorm responds:

thank you for your honesty. Now, tell me more about why you don't like it, so I can continue improving, please.


LiteBulbLiteBulb

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

Lol...