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Hello! My first Flash Animation! Hope you like It!
I know it is not good as others make, but it is one of my firsts,and im only 12 :P
Please give me some constructive critism, and tell me where i am wrong, so i can learn something.
Any help from some stickman movie maker is appreciated a lot.
Thanks for viewing!
'maybe' some more sound.
Cause what are movies without sound?
You should improve the look of your sticks and also like someone down me already said, make them flow.
Your backgrounds are still bad, but don't worry you'll become better after a time. For someone who's 12 they look pretty good.
The Story is not that good, but i think you'll come up with something good in the future.
Also please make the start button easier to find (lol)
hey thnx for the review... i got new sounds but cant seem to get good background music. any website you know for this? i got some tips by seeing videos of hyun and terkoiz... but i don't know about the backgrounds... maybe i'll get them over time :P. thnx for reviewing (and my backstory is on my youtube channel of the same name as my username [can we put links here?] ) and by now, i know how to make preloaders and stuff. thnx for reviewing and wathcing!
Not bad I guess, not much to it, but for your first flash I definitely think you have some potential. And I think you should not be so cliche about your stickman, and what I mean by that is...since your animation isn't as good right now, I think you should put all your focus on originality and story and not so much on fighting. All the stickmen flashes have these long annoying battles, the only thing that makes them bearable is that most are skillfully animated. Don't try to be like everyone else, make your flash your own and people will appreciate them. A great story can compensate for subpar animation and artwork.
Thankyou for reviewing and watching. I hope you find the story better that is coming in my next flash, which is coming out in a day or two
i like dis. pretty cool.
If your only 12 well done, i'm not a flash animator but as far as stickman flash goes, it has to flow, this did not but keep trying i'll give you 4/5 cause of effort.
Thnx for reviewing and watching, but by flow do you mean high fps or flow in the story (like, you know, not being to fast in telling the story or such)
Good first, but needs improvement...
You've got a solid first flash here. Some tips for improvement:
-Make your play button self-evident. I shouldn't have to search/guess where it is.
-Graphics need to be upgraded. If you decide you'd like to get into flash animation you may even want to buy a drawing tablet.
-Sound FX could have been better: actual voices for your characters and a larger variety of sounds for the fighting scene.
-Music is a must for any fighting scene! It makes it more intense!
Otherwise, I enjoyed it and thought you did well for your first time. Keep it up and see if you can't create a more original story for your next flash.
Thnx for watching and reviewing!
Its a time now, but i now know how to make preloaders with a self evident play button (sorry for the button!)
I will see that i can buy a tablet or not... i have on my wishlist atm.
For the sounds.. i got a new website (recommended by hyun on his videos) and i saw that no one usually makes their stickman really "talk" so i stuck to text (and also coz my mic is not one of the best :P)
As for the music.. can you tell me any good sites where i can get some background music stuff ...
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