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It still needs some more music and sound effects.
COWBOY BEEBOP?! good choice!
Seriously you really aughta finish this. its really good. you should also do all the characters in brawl. just sayin >.>
but as for criticism, the bat needs to move faster and harder to make it look like its actually hitting the bag instead of just tapping it lightly. also the chick bags words were really hard to see so it be better if you made her words like marios with only the outline of color. or you could just voice over them but i wouldnt suggest that unless you got some really good voice actors
still love this thing though
I think it's good the way it is.
ITs quite good
I liked it... but really it has to be much faster...as for the bat at the start.. that was too slow...and mario too slow too...If and when you make this finished version all you really gotta do is make it play a little faster than it did :D
also the part with no Sound Fx or music creeped me out a bit then i got a frieght when u put in random lighting sounds for mario.. well cya :D
You're characters look way too 2-D ish, you're got to learn how to colour the edges and draw the characters in a way that makes them look like 3D chars. Pls, I was hoping for a more 'Brawl' type of battle, with the percentage's and stuff, the story is great, but you need to work on your animation and battle scenes. Give the sandbag his own special moves too.
List of Needs
The rating is low not because your flash is terrible. But it is a work in progress. Things that need improvement:
--Animation: lack of fluidity in spots, looks too 2-D, the motion is way too slow, characers lacking in expressiveness.
--Sound: needs a lot more sound effects, and would benefit from some voice acting, or voice sound effects with subtitles.
--Scripting: this is the strongest point so far. Some tweaking should be done to improve clarity of the story. Keep in mind that this is a story idea that others have done, so you need to find some element, be it humor or odd plot twists, to make it unique.
--Style: I don't see a need for major changes here. Your style is yours afer all. But certainly improving the skills to draw the characters from different angles would be an improvement.
Hey, i'm all up or criticism and all, but when you haven't made a flash yourself
I don't think you have any right to be a complete prick ok, huh OK!
You say it needs sound effects, if you would have read my fucking comment you would have noticed that I said that myself you prick so Fuck you, you and your cum gargling mother.
It's time for Rifftrax...
Detective Nwar and his partner Blanche might as well investigate a water crisis.
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