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Nov 13, 2010 | 4:42 AM EST

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Thanks to Khuskan!! FOR his Music..



Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

needs 'little' more detail here and there.

+ Plot
+ Presentation. (storyboard?)
-- Even with this style; I think it needs 'little' more detail here and there.
ex: people don't slide when they move, they bob up and down.
ex: adding a hat or something to the toilet guy so we can tell him apart from the main character.
ex: voice timing at the end.

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apit2010 responds:

first mean....he walk down and up
second example......put hat at the guy fix toilet
last example....has a voice timing....

Thanks a lot for your tips and thanks for the score


Rated 0.5 / 5 stars

will need improvement

To improve on your next animation, I suggest you practice a bit in flash on your animation Technic, because the animation in this is rather stiff, the art needs an improvement also. Have a look on newgrounds and gain inspiration from what you see and play. Before you post anything on newgrounds, ask yourself, is this flash worth posting? If you answered no, then don't post. It will save you from the mean words of the community. Be original, have fun with what your making, and don't rush. I hope you find a way to improve on your next flash with what I have told you in this review.

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apit2010 responds:

I try to do a features movies