Beutiful, just fucking beutiful

you surely know how to bring out the beauty of industrial art, its rare to find anything like this on this site, just cartoonish crap they have on here, your art is what separates the anons from the true artist,

you're work is heavily appreciated from me, don't stop submitting your work (cause i need something to enjoy on here)

Sweet

I thought the flash was pretty neat but isn't there a thing on Youtube where it could re-size to full-screen because my eyes hurt from just looking at it at all because of all of the flashes. I thought it was pretty cool. the art was violent and already gave me a thought of this animation. You should try finding something that can reduce the file-size. I think there is some software online that can reduce the file-size of SWFS. that would be neat, although it still probably wouldn't be up-loadable.

Back to topic here, the animation was pretty smooth and the quick, flashy transition gave it feeling to it which was pretty nice although, I think the world would on resort to this if it was like, ran by the devil or something because people can't be that greed and ignorant... right? Plus I think people would learn in 100 years. But didn't that girl die like 3 times or something? I, myself enjoyed all the feeling coming from this flash and I do, understand the message too.

I really don't know why you have been so negative in your responses but whatever... I really enjoyed this one and I hope the next one can be, smaller in file size so it could be bigger. Overall I loved it.

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-Joshsouza

Good, but I'm unsure

I think that you've made a good looking piece here, but there are a few bits that need to be looked into, in order to benefit from the impression that you're trying to make:

1) This is directly ported in from YouTube. While this may not bring into question the validity of who wrote it (I'm positive it's yours) I think that you need to find a way to get the video itself uploaded here, as opposed to hosted on YouTube and embedded. I'd rather see you and Newgrounds get the ad revenue for the clicks on this page

2) Screen size - you've got the small screen in the middle of this piece and have filled up the border with useless wastage. You could make the video so much bigger, by utilising the resources available to you. If the file size limit is an issue, PM TomFulp and get it increased to around 20 meg.

3) Background - the black border, surrounding the largely black presentation doesn't go together well - lightening it up would help, so that you can convey the dirt, pollution and desperation better within the video itself.

I'm not sure that I agree with the messages in the video, but these might not even be your own, so I won't dwell on that, to be honest.

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different

I liked it. It had a very deep message to it along with the bland black and brown plainness that set a nice atmosphere to it. I did feel that you used a bit too much of the flashing words, I would have liked to watch some sections of the video without having to strain my eyes to see what was going on, but it still helped move the story along.

The music was more unusual than I'm used to hearing, and I have heard "different" music before (if that conveys what I'm trying to get at), a bit too different for me, but I appreciated the selection nonetheless.

I gave it 3/5 for personal taste, but 9/10 because of the message and how you got it across. I believe I understand some of what you were expressing but not all of it, I'm not too sure.

Otherwise, this is a good video. It was a bit disappointing that it wasn't in a regular file to fit Newgrounds, but since you have it on so many different sites I guess you would choose a "one-size-fits-all" file.

Also- I fucking love how you chew out the arrogant bastard below :P

Meh

The presentation is awful. You've got some good video editing skills, but zero taste in production. Nobody wants to watch a small embedded youtube player, and the score is an obvious reflection of that. I followed the link to see if maybe the player could be expanded, and found it could be on youtube, but not here. However, you didn't upload this in HD. In fact, I can't even get 480p with this, so it's straight standard definition and it looks terrible expanded anyway - let alone full screen. I'm not really sure why you would render this in SD at all. Not only that, but I guarantee the file size can't be that big. Not near as large as if you rendered this in high quality at least.

As far as the animation/video editing itself, it had a nice feel to it. I probably saw more text flash before my eyes than I've seen in any other video, period. The 'crazy text' effect started to get old really fast and you continued it throughout the entire length of the animation. The little girl was probably the best part about the animation, and I think you could have expanded upon that a bit. The whole video had a great theme to it and I think I understand what you're trying to convey pretty well.

The music was probably the best part about the piece. That track was really good, and it fit the animation amazingly. I was curious about who did the piece but I see you've failed to list it under the "Author and File Information." You're supposed to credit them though. I mean, you could have at least listed the work you put into this, what software you used to produce it, the file size, etc in the author comments.

I checked the comments out on youtube and you listed very little also. Doesn't look like you're a very big name on youtube either. Personally, I have over 20 times more subscribers than you do and my videos are all in Hi def, so you can take my advice or not, it's whatever, but if you want to improve and get some attention to these you should take my advice.

Overall I'd say the editing you've done here is decent, but like I said, a tiny standard definition video just doesn't look all that impressive.