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Oct 25, 2010 | 9:47 AM EDT

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Author Comments

This is my very first Flash Animation. Any criticism are welcome (even if it is harsh). Njoy :)

This webtoon is about the struggle between male and female regarding neatness and tidiness.
It shows that in the past and also in the future a female (mom, wife etc.) will always scold a male for being untidy

Reviews


Eduard2011Eduard2011

Rated 4 / 5 stars

Good and Funny

It's funny, I like the way your Adam skated in although I think that wasn't supposed to happen, it's pretty funny.
Good miniature animation.
I would like to point out that what Thazrog said is very true. Your flash would look very good if it had more movement, even if that means that the heads move from right to left on their bodies.

The music also fits the animation.



nationalityOFmunkynationalityOFmunky

Rated 4 / 5 stars

Its a nice start

I liked it its good for a first and i like the way their leaves also get blown around in the beginning



ThazrogThazrog

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

"I liked it"

I like the style that you've used, the graphics are great but a little dead or without movement. I'd say with a little practice you could make very good quality movies.


KleinM responds:

Thanx man. I realized in the end that I focused more on my drawings than the actual movements of the characters


reverendreverend

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

Pretty good

Heh, a pretty nice little animation. It was nice how you started in the past and then flash forward to the future and managed to tie them together in order to give a nice little joke. The animation was pretty good, nothing to spectacular. If you aren't going to do a lot of movement in your scenes, then it would be best if you make your backgrounds detailed and add some shading to add depth to it. The music is simple and okay and the plot was straight to the point in following the joke. All in all, a nice little animation. Nice work!


KleinM responds:

Cool, thanks for the advice. I'll work on shading and making backgrounds more detailed


DrillurDrillur

Rated 1.5 / 5 stars

oh my GOD

I need to stop watching new flashes by new authors. This was pretty goddamn horrible. If you left out the flash-forward scene and stayed in the past, the joke would still have made sense and would have been funnier. The way you did it treated your viewers as being stupid and it ended very badly.

Good start compared to most! :D


KleinM responds:

Thanx. We all have to start somewhere... A first is supposed to be like this