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Oct 25, 2010 | 7:41 AM EDT

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My first animation ever! Please rate and review.

Chuck Walker, always on the wrong end of any stick, often finds himself in compromising positions that lead to rash solutions. Being the All-American Badass that he is, Chuck refuses to bow down to authority, often being the cause of his misfortune. Dick Slaughter is the sheriff of the local county and has been "tipped off" by Estoban De La Rosa that Chuck was involved in a murder on the Jenkin's Ranch... Having Chuck disappear would be less than disastrous for De La Rosa and being an entrepreneur, Slaughter is happy to oblige. The conflicting moments play out in this animation.
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Thank you to everyone for the excellent response! I never expected my humble drawings to become a featured flash. Thanks for all the helpful reviews and comments.

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SirBladewindSirBladewind

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars October 28, 2010

Front page?

For a first animation? Helluva job.

Only complaint was that the speech was a little hard to understand and i would have at least liked to see the other guy die at the end. You know, have an ending scene :O

Still this bodes well for you. I see a lot of crap animations come on here that leave just as quickly, but yours are very fresh and interesting and I'd be happy to see you stay. I'm sure you will only get better in skill and your ideas will florish the longer you are here so by all means make yourself at home. :)



Dark-scarecrowDark-scarecrow

Rated 4 / 5 stars October 28, 2010

go ahead.

good draw, terrible sound, a lot of noise an echoe. but it seems a good plot. keep on the job.


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PerfectRequiemPerfectRequiem

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars October 27, 2010

Hmm, not bad.

Not bad for a first animation, definitely seems like you're starting on the right foot. Your story writing could use a little work, however...I was rather disappointed with the simple way that it ended, but maybe there was a message I'm missing? Either way, practice will make perfect for you, I'm sure.


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CrystalWolf0CrystalWolf0

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars October 27, 2010

It's your first. It's way better than most firsts.

Notice to the folks:
I think those of you who are giving this guy a hellish time need to read the earlier reviews. This is his first animation.
I repeat, this is his FIRST, animation, on flash.
Now, for a first, that ain't all that bad. Kindly stop giving the kid a heart attack, and have some kind of appreciation for, at the very least, that fact.
Even the "bests" on newgrounds have a starting point, and it's not always impressive. It's where they WENT after that point.
Half of their firsts never even found the front page.
Check those out some time, if you don't believe me.

That being said, I won't deny that it's not the best out there, but how many flash animation firsts have you seen that had zero movement, zero attempt to make any depiction of a character before tossing him into the mix, zero attempt at voices at all... O-o And I've seen a few things of that like hit the front page before. Were they first attempts? Not usually, but every fable finds its fans.
I couldn't figure out head nor tail what was up in those.
(Aka, Chat bubbles that vanished before you were done reading them.)

And ya know what? I've seen some of those hit the front page. HECK, I've occassionally seen one of those "cawkjokes and dick cracks" flashes hit the front page, and half of the time they weren't even funny.

So in light of that, I really can't give this author a bad score. They're new, and they've tried to do the things that make half of us cringe, and that only a few animators have ever gotten 100% right.

Lip to voice
I've only ever seen 4 - 6 artists get character-to-voice mouth-synching spot on, and half of em are animating sticks (and doing so very well I might add!).
Lip to voice attempt did exist, however shabby it may or may not have been. He tried. It shows. O-o Paint wont get you too far though. Might wanna think about getting an illustrator program, though I don't know what's compatible.

Movement existed!
Without a crappy skipping quality, although the movements were abrupt, and jagged in several parts of the animation, most notably when that guy at the start is smoking.

Storyline... ehhh... xD
Some basic degree of storyline. But not much. :P Ya lost a point or two there.
Did he try? Maybe, maybe not. However, I don't think that half of us would fire off a story that we considered downright awesome on our first submission, and it seems that some of us have forgotten that this guy is doing this ALONE. Some of the best storylines on newgrounds were only possible because there's a full team working on their production.

That and, yeah, sure, the ending and how anti climactic it was. :) Could've used just a bit of a closing part, even if it were only one of those stereotypical western camera views from the dead guy's resting place looking up at the victors facade as he turns and- you know where I'm going with that. xD

That aside, how many of you can tell me that yer first got this far? You can call it a fluke, but that's neglecting to mention that your own didn't... >.>
O-o That, and if this is his starting point, then he's not doing half as badly as some of these comments are making it seem.
...I mean telling him not to open flash? That's pretty messed up... Look around before you post, and see that for a first, this is impressive.

You'll get a 7 from me. I think it's pretty fair.
If I were to tell ya how you've done so far, you've got a ways to go, but yer not doing badly. Most people avoid that "walking towards" view of a character with every fiber of their being due to the difficulty of getting it animated in a semi-realistic manner. But you tried. I don't see it often.
(xP you didn't quite hit that part, but if ya look around long enough on this thing, you'll eventually find a video that you can probably glean something from. :o)

So in summary,

Animation - Not bad for yer first. Kudo's, but try to get some feel into those movements. That arm went from moving forward to jetlining back during the smoking scene.
storyline - xD Needs work. Hate to say it, but lots of it. :)
Voices - might need a new mike.
Try - nice.


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Darksinne responds:

Thank you for taking the time to write this review. I'm glad you can see it for what it is.

I will definitely practice and work to improve on everything you mentioned :)


guytheguythe

Rated 3 / 5 stars October 27, 2010

cool i guess.

Ok ill be honest the animation was pretty good but it was very lacking in story or action. in other words if you do make another one story is a definite area to improve in and maybe make things a little faster because the ride to the tavern was pretty bland, i mean at least have him explain why he's gonna shoot some guy. you know what i mean? other than that it was not bad for your first animation... good job :D


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