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Its an unexpected love story which features a unpredictable storyline, simple use of shapes were used mainly used.
Need some improvements
The grass stands still while the rest of the pictures is moving
Stick man... c'mon...
The strory is, well, simple.
Do something about your preloader!
Room for improvement
Some good aspects, but definitely some work is needed on this.
A liked your animation style, and the character movements were fairly fluid, which is great.
Art style was a bit different, in particular the white stick men, with the scenery visible behind them- I liked this and I think it gives it a more artistic feel rather than having simple black stick men
Excellent choice of music really added to the feel of the animation
Areas to work on:
Very short, and no real story!
Some dialogue would have been nice, even if it was just scrolling text at the top of the screen. This added to the feel that there was no story here, as the viewer was given no real idea of what was going on. Who were the characters? How did they feel? Why did they start fighting? Why did she fall for the second guy?
Sound effects of some sort would have added to the battle scene.
Work on your story writing, and keep improving your drawing and animation skills, but still a very passable effort!
Um,.... there's a bug. The preloader's not working and this makes the flash move on with the preloader on.... Fix the bug please.
Going back, one last time...
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