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This my first flash animtion.
for your first
it wasnt too bad!
the biggest problem i felt was the animation didnt feel fluid at all. There were wayyyyy too many blackouts and cuts between scenes. make them more fluid, show the ninja running around and his actions. in other words, dont just jump from scene to scene... show some of the "in between" if that makes sense
The other thing was the "slow motion" feel you put on movements in the animation like the ninja stars. get rid of it. making things move at the right speed in an animation might take some experience
Sound effects could use a touch up too. Add some more, or even better, ambient sounds in the background. Having one single sound like a footstep or ninja star hit in the middle of nothingness sounds weird.
hope this helped
This is your FIRST flash! :O I wish people were considerate enough to post their first flashes with something with an obvious amount of effort put into it! Excellent work! I enjoyed it and look forward to seeing part 2! :D
A Good Start
It isn't perfect, but it's a very good start. The visuals are alright, and honestly the opening caught my attention. My only recommendation is to work on the sound quality. The repeated, extremely-quick changes of music, and the way the volume seemed to get higher and lower every time the scene changed, did take away from the visuals a bit. Still, that's a pretty simple fix. Good job, and keep workin' on this stuff. There's some real potential here.
(One last note: Though I do comment on the sound, the actual choice of music isn't bad. The majority of it had some pretty appropriate action music. I kinda liked it, even. It's in my head now. ><;)
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