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Newgrounds has marked my flash as Marked for Administrative Review.....So i fixed and i submitted again....
needs some work but your on your way to be an amazing animator!
good, but with a few things off
like 1. some of the blood was over the stick figures (arrangement problem with the blood being put over the sticks)
2. animation of the sticks was good, the animations of what I assume are bombs were a little slow. Same with the bullets.
otherwise, you got the hang of most of it.
Not that good...
The entire thing is centered around violence, with animations that could be improved, not to mention the execution is wrong, and needs a story about all this violence that is happening for no known reason. PLEASE try doing a better flash, either by improving this one or making a new one. Still, 5 for the effort. Also, there is a script so you don't end up restarting everything from the loading screen, and maybe for stopping your flash altogether, which you should program in anyway. You are about 72% through the way of the path to become an amateur/novice animator, so please improve, or you may find yourself backtracking...
Keep on Truckin'
This is a cartoon focused completely on violence, although judging from the quality and the fact it's a stick movie, this comes as no true surprise. Immediately that fact drains quite alot of substance from the animation as a whole, with nothing to wrap my head around why do I feel involved at all?
There is no premise or reason to this senseless violence, and from what I've seen it was not meant to be random or comical in any way what so ever.
I'm sure you must have a decently creative mind being on this sight, suredly you could come up with some sort of character even if it's a stick. Give him a distinctive feature and a specific reason for murdering masses of other sticks if you are going to go about a series like this.
Otherwise this is just a simple practice animation, with simple sound and graphics. I ask you to consider what you're submitting to the portal before throwing it up and understand that the newgrounds community will not find this fufilling (As it serves no other purpose than practice) in much a way of any other stick movie, it simply takes space in the portal.
I'm honestly not trying to be harsh or victimize you in any way, I just want you to understand that if you're going to submit something to the portal try to keep it significant. Otherwise simply use the dumping grounds to store practice animations (And if you want criticism make a topic on the Forums then link it so people may see it.) or keep it on your computer and show it to some friends before submitting.
If you have any questions you can PM me, I'll answer anything you ask.
Keep on animating, and I beg that you get a microphone of some kind in your years so that the stories you create can finally take actual life.
I hope this helped you understand the Newgrounds community.
hmm stick movie
crude and scribbly. poor animation, without proper walking. Blood stays in the air. No story. little entertainment. No originality.
I would not have passed this except that the sounds are good, the music is good and it has proper credits. Keep practicing try and find something with a story and personality. There are good stick movies, but really, its all been done. If you really must do stick, try zooming in to faces now and then and getting some point and purpose to the killing etc.
Going back, one last time...
Detective Nwar untangles a massive copycat kidnapping conspiracy.
Joel runs out of shivs. Surley Ellie is not carrying anything that'll help him
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