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First flash movie.
First time to make it.
First time to submit it in this here site.
Hope you enjoy.
Well drawn filled with emotion
Very emotional flash. I can see you're really trying to convey a feeling and a thought through these pictures and words. I think you could have enhanced the flash experience with some background sound...nothing too big to ruin to flash itself but something as simple as maybe wind blowing. A tiny bit of sound goes a long way~!
I have to say it was missing a lot.
But I definitely liked it. Didn't really understand it, didn't really need to. Beautiful art, great poetry. Soft background music would have been fitting, but I can't argue with a creator's decisions of silence v.s. background.
As stated by the previous reviewer, Daisysantulips, the text was -often- too lightly coloured to see. I would fix this by looking through and picking out those spots, then choosing darker colours like navy blue, forest green and velvet purple, to match the mainly pink-and-red tints and hues in the movie.
Remember, colours set off the feeling of your flash works, which is why that is always important - use the right colours. Gentle music can add to this feeling... It could start of soothing and end sadly, as the poem did.
Other than these, I have no more suggestions for you, except make another as amazing as this.
Oh my god, that was so amazing. I totally feel you. I can relate to that poem, and that girl. The person reviewing before me said the poem is Robert Frost, and I'm not sure if it is or not, but if that ISN'T Robert Frost, then you are a beautiful poet. And if it is, then nice tribute, I'm going to the bookstore. PROBLEMS: You DEFINITLY need some music, some classical piano would work nicely. And the text was too light-colored, sometimes I couldn't read it. Thanks, for the inspiration.
Beautiful, but you need some work...
I think I will never see something as beautiful as a tree... er, as a cherry blossom.... Well assuming that Robert Frost forgives you I think the poem and the way you presented it was nice and original and you have some incredible artistic talent there that needs some polishing.
It does need some audio. My ears were aching from the lack of sound but some simple audio track that fits the mood of the poem should be used. In addition to this without having much experience with flash you might want to be careful I could barely read the text in some places. It went by too fast.
Aside from the above mentioned things I think this is a marvolous work for a first flash. I see a lot of potential in you that I do not want to see go to waste. Please improve this! And that girl in the movie was cute! was that supposed to be you!?
i really enjoyed the animation and the poem. i think that it would improve the cartoon much more if there was some light sad music in the background to enhance the mood. also the part when single words come up one by one i would speed that up just a little becuase there is a lil too much of a break between them.. which makes it seem to just lag on.
guy drains his main vein.
The first episode of my original anime
Two Men Fight to the Death!
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