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Me messing around with flash and bannedstory 4 results into a flash with a bad story and animation flaws I can't fix now(that's why it says error above).
Oh well next time i can do better i guess.
I'm expecting comment's saying that this sucks balls.
Credits: Backgrounds: BAnendstory BAckground forum.
Sprites: Maplesimulator/banendstor y.
Music: youtube downloader.
2 other sounds: http://soundbible.com/
Copyright: Nexon,wiazet mapelstory.
i loved it so much u should make a new one soon
it's okay, but needs a few minor improvements.
You should add a replay button instead of automatically having the movie play again, that causes the music to overlap and clash with each other. I guess while we're in that department, a scene selector would greatly add onto your flashes.
Another thing is to watch the spelling and grammar - it's a simple but important way to give your audience a better impression.
Your soundtracks were surprisingly good, though. However, you should work on a credit scene at the end that properly credits the authors of those soundtracks. I know you attempted to add credits in your comments, but the way it is now won't suffice. You need to be more specific.
Those are the few things that I saw right away. I could say a few more things about the plot and character development, but I'll leave that to your own devices.
Needs more testing
You have a fair story beginning, but the characters act a little too friendly at the end. Most people would be upset about being kidnapped. And why wouldn't he know the names of the very people he fetched?
The backgrounds also moved slightly vertically, you should fix that.
The movie also loops, you should prevent that.
This sucks balls
- The art was pretty good - even though it was ripped straight out of Maple Story...
- The music was fine, although that's as far I am willing to go.
- The story was weak, not 'experimental' like you listed the animation, considering it was neither funny nor thought-provoking.
- Too much dialogue resuled in terrible storytelling. The storytelling should have been more visual, more condensed or spoken to create a nice flow of the story and hold the viewers' interest.
- Fucking horrible grammar.
Overall, this is simply not worthy of being on Newgrounds, I'm afraid. Sorry mate, but I tried to be fair.
I couldn't watch all of it, sorry
The story just got worse as it went on. The guy with the sword wanted the two kids to come with him, so why did he attack them? And when the kids woke up, they immediately befriended the guy with the sword.
There was no reason for either of those events happenning the way they did. You need to work on story writing. Take your characters seriously, and the audience will too.
Oh, and the art was sprites, and there was very little animation to comment on. 1/10
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While taking the day off work, Lloyd and Glynis take in a movie
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