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Jul 7, 2010 | 7:04 PM EDT

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This is part 2 go watch part 1 first http://www.newgrounds.com /portal/view/541561

My first comic project of this length, It was done within 5 weeks and I didn't wanna do anything too over the top. Don't take the whole thing seriously and if youre looking for something deep or meaningful you wont find it.
It is what it is, I hope some may enjoy it.

Cause of the file size it had to be divided in 2 parts.

Warning: Contains Cartoon Porn, if you are easily offended by that you shouldn't look through it!

-Shadman

Instructions:
Navigate with "Left" and "Right" arrow keys.
"O" to set the current page to his original size.
"R" to fit the current page to the window border.

You can click and drag each page.
You can zoom in/out with the +/- on the number pad.
Its easier to read it you click on the "expand" option.

Reviews


eye-twistereye-twister

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

give some warning next time

Okay, I feel like this comic had a real abrupt change of pace. First, could you give warning that this porn containes rape? I'm not easily offended, but rape goes into a different category, you know?

A few issues I had with the narrative... Well the protagonist is doing things that would violate most readers' moral code, so you have to really make readers sympathize with him. Perhaps more character development? Like, I wasn't really rooting for the protagonist, so the ending may not have gotten the reaction you wanted from readers? Also, the dialogue is a little stiff and not that realistic for the situation. Otherwise, your art style is still really good and I liked the plot for the most part. I think if you worked on pacing and character development you could make some more compelling pieces.


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nzephiernzephier

Rated 3 / 5 stars

not much of a rape fan, but

the art was very creative, nothing ive seen before, pretty good stuff, and the story kept me interested. so all that being said, including the fact i am not a fan of rape, i give it the score i put down.



GungaDGungaD

Rated 2.5 / 5 stars

Good and Not Good

(Please note that this review contains some information that makes it a "spoiler".)

What is good about it is the drawing style and artistry. The clicking through one frame at a time is a novel way of letting the comic unfold. The story is simplistic and formulaic, which isn't a bad thing for a comic. But the way the story unfolds is what separates great comics from average comics like this one.

From what I can tell, the comic is supposed to have shocking and exploitative content, so one shouldn't be too surprised as the story unfolds and becomes more violent. But when I read through this I couldn't help but think about 1950's horror comics, and there is one way in which they suceed in telling a good story that this comic fails: most of the "horror" is implied. It is left to our imagination. This comic is so graphic that the "moral" of the story is lost in the images, and he moral comes off as a tacked-on justification for the graphic depiction of rape. Pulp fiction novels from the 1950's period allowed themselves to be more graphic with the depiction of depraved acts, but never to the extreme that your visuals take it to. There's a line between tawdry storytelling and pornography, and in my opinion that line was crossed. It's a shame, because I liked the look and artistry of the comic.

What is saddest to me is the number of people who read the comic and thought, "cool a naked chick with big boobs having sex," and not minding at all that she is being tortured and raped. That is explotative storytelling. I cannot understand the mindset of such people, and something tells me I do not want to either. (Roger Ebert said as much in his review of "I Spit on Your Grave," and what he said in the 1970's is still true today.)

In sum, your artistic skills are there. The ability to effectively tell a story is not. If you really want to tell a shocking tale with a moral, I would suggest finding some of the old 1950's horror comics and pulp ficiton, where a lot of that horror is left unseen to develop in the mind of the reader. Use that as research and inspiration to tweak your storytelling ability.


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Celx-RequinCelx-Requin

Rated 2.5 / 5 stars

Missed the mark big time...

Well as usual you display a fresh and fantastic artstyle, and scorps programming on the comic wasn't bad, although I would have liked some music...

On a technical level the comic is pretty good, but the story and writing seemed too nihilistic and disingenuous for my tastes...

These things would be fine if the point of the comic was only to serve as pornography, which doesn't require any real substance aside from anything that will further the fetishism intrinsic to pornography.

However the pornographic panels in the comic are outnumbered by the non-pornographic panels. Which means either one of two things, you either intended this to be a legitimate comic, or you added additional content so you wouldn't be viewed as a scummy pervert.

The Marquis quote at the beginning of the comic seems to point towards the former... That's where I feel the flaw in this comic lays, it's doesn't seem to be meant as pornography, so it's supposed to carry a message, and the message it gives off is both ostentatious, and pernicious.

The character is so unlikable, and his reasons for doing what he did, were selfish and disgusting, and maybe that's what you wanted to convey, these acts are committed by petty people.

On the other hand It also seems like you wanted to bring understanding as to why people go postal and commit atrocious acts, and used "being pushed too far" as the reason. That's the part I have the most difficulty with, I mean people everywhere deal with a shitload of stress, certainly more stress than this individual, and they don't go postal.

The idea that this individual's crimes are due to the harassment he received from his co-worker, and the frustration he felt at home seems mendacious. There were so many better options available to deal with his problems, instead he resorted to the most extreme.

At worst, you may have wanted to impart the idea that fucked up shit just happens, but that wouldn't really work because everything has a cause, and the cause you point towards is illogical.

Perhaps if you took the time to flesh out his situation more, his actions would have more context, and the story would work as a cautionary tale, or at least a critique on suburban life.

Fuck man even if you didn't give any explanation for his actions, and decided instead to focus solely on the aftermath of his actions, that would have serious potential be a damn fine story.

The only legitimate lesson one could really take with them after reading your comic is repulsive people commit repugnant crimes, but after that what?

It seemed like you wanted to say more but couldn't get all the plot points to tie together nicely, which is a shame.

On that note I've noticed you tend to quote Sade in your work often, While Sade is synonyms with "sadism" (after all his name did spawn the word). I feel it's important to say he wasn't really all that sadistic.

He never killed anyone outside of war, while he was a judge he released many prisoners sentenced to die.

Most importantly his work while unbelievably violent and graphic, was also satirical and had a feminist slate, women and men both commit despicable acts hence marking them as equal.

I mean in the "120 days of Sodom" when Augusta was killed during the "murderous passions" portion of the book her vagina and anus where cut into one, which her father then proceeded to penetrate, signifying the underlying theme that man and woman are really the same.

Another myth about Sade is he was a nihilistic person, which again isn't true, and one of his last pieces he wrote before he died titled the "priest and the prisoner" (I think...), anyway while he discussed his hatred of religion, he also mentioned the beauty he found in nature, and his belief that only man is responsible for his own
actions.

Point being Sade isn't really a good person to quote on a comic that comes off as misogynistic, and nihilistic, you should have picked someone like Hitler, Stalin, or Sadam instead.

Sincerely,
- Celx Requin



LaurapaloozaLaurapalooza

Rated 2.5 / 5 stars

Everything about it was subpar.

At best.

Don't even know why I'm giving it such a high score. Zero seems harsh, so have half of ten.