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my first flash :D done in 4 days so sorry if it sucks
whats the worst that can happen?
not this ^_^
as a smoker myself i thought this would be another lame lecture, but i found it funny, i like your accents they fit well with the humor, you lip syncing is a little off and your artwork needs a tiny tweek, but otherwise great!
thanks, the accents weren't put on -_-
I see great potential in your animation skills! Plus, for your first Newgrounds submission, I'm glad you took the time to make a decent short! Instead of trying to submit some pathetic trash. Although this movie is only a short, and not much happens, I still think its worthy of at least a 2.50+ (in my opinion).
Now, for the actual animation itself, its not to shabby. The voice acting was alright, the animation was good (loved the way you animated the mouths); the animation did go pretty fast, but that's not a hard thing to fix. Plus a play/replay button never hurt anyone!
But above all great work man, and keep it up! Can't wait to see more animations from you!
best review so far thanks :D
Very short and not very funny. Sorry.
everyone's entitled to there own opinion :)
Good but its way to short, try making more than one joke in a video, also play button and replay would be nice.
I actually did make a play and replay button. they work on deviantArt but not on newgrounds strangely
I give this a 6 (I did vote 4 to float your score a bit, though, cause I'd hate to see this blammed) because I laughed. The facial movement was excellent.
Pros: Funny, well drawn (Except for the end
Con: poorly animated (especially the character blacking out at the end.
Do better next time, and I really mean that. Not because this was bad, but because I really want to see more from you. This is better than the first eddsworld flash, and look where he ended up (after a while).
Get a script and you may see consistent 3.0-4.0 ratings! If you actually read this, Diran, drop me a line ;-)
thanks for the creative critisism, though technicaly my first, this is just a short while i'm working on larger projects
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