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Jun 29, 2010 | 2:34 PM EDT

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Hello,

Here is another short but sweet chapter, the series is almost done now...
Anyway watch all the prior chapters, or this won't make sense, and all that jazz...

I respond to all reviews, unless your an asshole...
Add me to you favorites if you want a p.m when the last two chapters are released!

Sincerely,
- Celx

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CoopCoop

Rated 4 / 5 stars July 12, 2010

Narration?

Perhaps this piece would be better with the traditional comic book narrator role, that appears in the frame's top left corner, perhaps just setting the scene. "I went to the victim's house and found that a light was on inside." If that helps to set the scene for the first frame and you'll get people into the story quicker.

I think that something needs to be done to make the writing of the speech bubbles more legible, since it will help to keep the audience there. The ragged state of the speech should be able to stand up on the state of the drawing alone, so I don't think you'll suffer there.

Keep them coming, I'm getting into this series.

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Celx-Requin responds:

Hello,

I wanted to keep the narration something that only occurs when Colin's segments are on, I just felt it would be darker, and more in tune with the overall feel I wanted to convey...

Thanks,
- Celx

P.S. Next one is out tonight!


HaggardHaggard

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars July 11, 2010

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Very short part again, but this time the story is advacned further (even though not that much happens here). I had some doubt regarding how you want to tie up all the loose ends in the story line, but somehow after reading this chapter I have a feeling that you will indeed answer all (or almost all) the questions that are left open now with the remaining chapters.

You build up a very good cliff hanger here. "Do you know what the 'Sculptor' does with the organs? No? Good, believe me, you don't WANT to know!" <- Maybe Simon is right about that, but as a reader of this comic I OF COURSE want to know what this is all about and I'm sure we get to know this in the remainging chapters.

One idea I had when reading this chapter: Maybe you could add some sound effects. Sure, it's a comic and comics usually don't have sound effects. But a little "click" sound and a "BANG" sound would fit in really well in those two panels where Simon kills himself, I think.

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Celx-Requin responds:

I can promise you this much, when you find out you'll be like wow damn...
The next chapter is really long but I should hopefully be done in a couple of days,
(I'm working on it right now)...

Thanks,
- Celx


SoapbubbleSoapbubble

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars July 10, 2010

Dark and shocking

I must say, I'm starting to like your use of colours. Just a few colours that really completely sets the mood for the entire comic. Black, red and white? It works out very well, especially seeing as you've barely used red, and only where it really fits.

There are some typos, but that doesn't really mean much. The story in this chapter is short, as per usual, but really good, and it does pull you in, and leave you wanting for mroe. At least, that's what I feel.

As with the last episode, you've used some great audio in the background, that really fits really well with the story and the mood that you're trying to set, sort of eerily, scary but not IN-YOUR-FACE shocking/scary.

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Celx-Requin responds:

Thanks I hope you'll comment on the last two!
Sincerely,
- Celx

P.S. what exactly are the typos that info will be most appreciated!


FroFro

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars July 9, 2010

This was a good chapter.

As you can imagine my reviews for your submissions are getting quite repetitive right now, but it's only because very little has changed besides the story line. I won't go into as much detail with everything because it's basically the same thing that I've said in every other of these series. Since I keep requesting these things to be changed and they haven't changed then I suppose your just going to stick it out as it is. :P

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Anyway, the graphics were good in this one. I enjoyed them a little more than I usually do. These would probably be my second favorite graphics you've had in the series. When you implement the red in just the right spot it really helps.

~ Story/Content ~

Even though this one was very short it left me wanting to know what was going to happen. I really want to know why the sculptor is getting these organs now because of this submission. I'm hoping you won't disappoint in the future episodes, but at the same time I hope they are slightly longer.

~ Audio ~

Like always, sound effects, blah blah blah, but the music is very fitting and you've always done a good job of that.

~ Overall ~

I think you might actually be able to do this as one submission if you just loop the same song over for the entire thing. Hopefully it's still something you are thinking about because it's something that I would like to see.

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Celx-Requin responds:

Hello,

I actually am listening to what people have been saying, and I will be implementing some things that people have suggested in the near future.

The next one is going to be really long,
as always thanks for the review!
Sincerely,
- Celx


JAW729JAW729

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars June 29, 2010

Stimulus

Computer tech knowledge is noteable (exceeds the average), music is composed well, adds to the moog thang.


Celx-Requin responds:

Thanks,
- Celx