I haven't seen one of these in awhile and I liked it alot the animation was very smooth it was a bit short and there was a little too much blank time at the end but overall I liked it alot

the "look at how poetic, dark and brooding I am" films are so old. You arent artsy and the video itself wasn't even too good. Very little animation and half way through I lost picture. Proof these vids before you submit them. The sound effects were generic, the overall message and mood have been done before countless times. its rediculous.

Suggestions:
If your into dark stuff, think of complex horror stories. Not complex at first start slow, but work into the genre. Practice these stories on paper, work with them until you absolutely shit yourself over how awesome they are. Random "dark" genre isnt all that good. People may just give you high scores like "WOW YOUR SO DEEP" but it wont work for everyone.

fix the no vision problem halfway through the video.

I was not sure if you were wanting the viewer to be able to read the poems and text that you had on screen. they went by too fast. also the blank white at the end lasted for way too long and really i am confused to why you felt like putting that in there. I mean did you do it so your audio track would fit better? or were you going for dramatic effect. Because if it was the second one you really need to allow the viewer to read the text and slow up the animation a bit as well so we can clutch the story line.

I don't know how well I can explain me liking this animation. But I think your animation style is really good - its flow and smoothness was quite effective. I'm not entirely sure what the message was (if there is any), but it was vague and strong enough to make me ponder on it. Props for the art. Props for provoking thought. Just a little unclear to me - odd narrative style.

nice but too much blank space in the end,I think you did it to get to a point or to make the sense of nothingness lol... you can do it better!!! keep at the good work.