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May 28, 2010 | 8:04 AM EDT

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Author Comments

This thing has been on my plate for about a year and a half.
For some reason I couldn't pull it off.

That's because my voice isn't this awesome.

Anywho, this thing is just TWEENTASTIC.
I wanted it to be simple.

ENJOY.

Reviews


Killer70Killer70

Rated 4 / 5 stars

FUNNY

The heat of going through the atmosphere would kill him, and melt the chocolate. Besides, there's gravity, so he would've died by the fall. Especially if he landed on something sharp. other than grass. But he would still die if he landed on grass.)

HES IN SPACE U DICK SO THERES NO GRAVITY!!!!!!!!!!!



Epicnesslover01Epicnesslover01

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

Hm.

Quite a sad story with very odd rhyming.

(@468255

The heat of going through the atmosphere would kill him, and melt the chocolate. Besides, there's gravity, so he would've died by the fall. Especially if he landed on something sharp. other than grass. But he would still die if he landed on grass.)



bigxmanxbigxmanx

Rated 5 / 5 stars

Great Drama

BW the rhyme scheme and Ave Maria at the end was intense lol
Great Job


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JeremyLokkenJeremyLokken

Rated 5 / 5 stars

great conflict

Nice original story, what a dilemma that character had! Sometimes it's hard to write conflict in a short story, but this was very clear. Liked how it was B&W, kept it dramatic.


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PlastikmenPlastikmen

Rated 5 / 5 stars

Fantastic

This could be your masterpiece! im conmoved with this flash.


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