I don't know if this is an improvement or not. i will make two more of these, basically the same story, but adding on a little more to the beginning and the end each one.
Please give me constructive criticism in the comments! I am new to Flash, and don't have a ton of time to use it.
Also, could you watch my other submissions and rate+comment on them too?
The song used is "La marelle", by daduk. The album was free, So you know, eat it. Daduk's music was used in Blueberry Garden, if anyone played that.