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I am jump starting myself to do more animations. so this will be a first entrée but i would really like ideas and help.
The wolf looked kinda cute
I really liked the dramatic music, the animation started out nice, but when the flying wolf appeared, he didn't look menacing enough. In fact, he looked more like a stuffed animal. A few too many curves.
The first problem has to do with composition. The creature was a bit too centered on the moon. And you drew strong curves in the wings and a loopy curve for the jaw--which kinda looked whimsicle to me. But one of the points I'm trying to make is that all the wolf should contrast the round moon behind him, to make things more unsettling.
The other point is that making everything more asymmetrical will add to the uneasiness as a whole.
Also, adding shadow would help.
And he didn't move--the second problem. What I would do to make it dramatic is make him throw his head back into a howl, then pan out as he unfurls his wings, then at the very end, after the music stops, show a close-up of just his eyes, maybe with a low growling sound.
I'm guessing that the birthday present is bringing life to that wolf character or something like that.
i see what you mean, it doesn't really look like...its staring you down more then its on a shelf for kids.
so, more contrast as in the moon be geometric and the wolf be more realistic?
i understand, and i also hear it saves time from a previous comment.
shadow is a great idea
no no X3 its literally a flash for a friend.
now my question to you is weither or not i should spend time trying to improve this flash? or try to move on to something more...meaningful?
-It's a birthday flash, yet it has absolutely NOTHING themed as such until it says "Happy Birthday".
-Rather dull flash to be honest.
Final Words: You have some potential as an artist, but this doesn't really belong here.
here as in newgrounds?
a very fair review and thank you for honesty.
it is dull but to the person i made it for the song represents who they are as an individual. BUT not to say i am not taking in to account in what you are saying. so i can promise you that future flashes i will try to attempt a "meaning"
thank you for your review
I always though Happy Birthday was the generally accepted tune, but alright.
it is unless you want to use a song with meaning ^^
Great for a first entry!
To make your artwork look more professional you can copy images that there are multiples (eyes, horns, and nails for example) and if they are reversed you can rotate/inverse them.
This does not just make it look better, but it also saves a lot of time.
thank you a lot for taking time to review my entree! i really didn't expect to get anything and then i come on to see i have 4 reviews.
i am definitely staying on newgrounds.
Pilot for my new show!
A story about a worm, a beetle and a very hungry bird…
New video for you to watch, while we wait for the next plague to happen...
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