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My first flash entry. This is the prologue to the series.
Episodes 1 and 2 were originally episode 1 but I had to split them because of time restraints. Sorry if this piece is a bit bland. Just think of it like the opening to starwars ;D
Special thanks to Delaciel and DruoxtheShredder for lending me thier talent.
Nice Voice and Beautiful Story Telling.
needs ALOT moar grafix and sprite animation, make it like a cinematic movie
loose the text - the voice is clear enough on its own - maybe subtitles instead.
and perhaps some background voices and sound-effects. and this would be epic. or simply move on the next project whatever ^^
Yeah this was just the prologue. Episode 2 has alot of action and I released it today!
Thank you for your review!
For the most part I was expecting some sprite action to be implemented, but I'm pretty sure that this was supposed to set up for the next part of the series. I would say though that the story in itself does provide some interesting concepts so I'll be looking forward to what you have in your next episode.
I released episode 2 today as well! There's alot more to that one!
Is that all?
Too much diary entry, could use editing. The log is actually really, really boring; the whole time I was thinking - is she still talking??? Show, don't tell. A better idea would have been to have her voice over, but show images of what she's talking about. Also, it's not necessary to have everything read to us and the color you chose was difficult to see against her image. Last thing, please use spell check.
Well it was just the prologue to set up the story. Episode 2 was posted today as well! there's alot more in that one!
Thank you for the review!
While he was narrating it should have probbable swithced to what happened. But the story seems really great!
Excellent VA, poor overall.
This prologue is very captivating in the way it tells a story through the spectacular voice acting on the part of dellaciel, she really is the saving grace of this Flash!
However, the rest of the "movie" falls short in many areas, particularly in graphics and animation. Plus, I very much doubt that viewers will want to watch something that is essentially a slideshow presentation (e.g. too much to be read, not enough actually happening, etc.) when they could watch something more exciting.
To improve this, I suggest that instead of having a text overlay for your prologue, try to incorporate scenes that describe the events as they unfold while maintaining dellaciel's superb narration. This could be done with merely pictures, similar to the style of an animated comic or you could try to animate it all in its entirety.
As it stands currently, it is very rough and unlikely to pass judgment. It has a lot of potential to be a great start to your story, I just feel it needs more work done to make it a treat for the viewers.
Episode 2 was released today as well. Be sure to check it out!
The return of Dr. Bees!
Goling about and preventing things.
He was working in a whip shop in Flushing, Queens...
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