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May 18, 2010 | 9:48 PM EDT

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Author Comments

Im still working on my main flash but i got bored and thought of this so i thought i would animate it!
This is my first flash submission to newgrounds so please point out my flaws.

Reviews


ArtDanValArtDanVal

Rated 0.5 / 5 stars

Too. Little. Animation.

The Good:
+Good mouth animations.
+Decent voice work.
+Low file size.

The Bad:
-Very short.
-Poor graphical quality (bad drawings, border pop-in).
-Some animation looked tacked-on and unnatural.
-Joke is revealed in the title page.

Suggestions:
*Flesh out the plot some more and add more scenes.
*Some fitting music would be nice.
*Work on your drawings and animation techniques.

Also known as, "Sandwich", Too Much Salt tells the tale of a young man who decides to have a sandwich for lunch one day, only to discover that it is much too salty for his liking. That's about it, really, which is a shame, really. I think that if perhaps you worked on building up to the joke and improved some of the drawings, this could be a lot funnier - as it stands now, it isn't very funny at all.

[0/5]

/ADV



KlobMeisterKlobMeister

Rated 2.5 / 5 stars

Wait what?

It was expected and yet, somewhat unexpected at the same time....

So therefore, an even 5.


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SurrealReverieSurrealReverie

Rated 3 / 5 stars

Not too bad

Nice audio work (even compared to more professional flashes on here) and the animation wasn't bad. A bit bland in terms of visuals, though and the absolute lack of a real punch line borders witty and irrelevant. For a first, not bad, just put a bit more in the next one.

Something that I strangely wanted to see in this:
He begins to shrivel up as he says "Too... Much... Salt..."

I think that's just because I'm a child of the cult cartoons like Ren & Stimpy and Invader Zim.


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Touch2004Touch2004

Rated 4 / 5 stars

What did my mother always used to say?

Don't put salt in your eye, don't put salt in your eye, put salt in....ALWAYS put salt in your eye!! Lol I like this, it's short and sweet, however if I had have submitted this like 6 years ago when I was into animating, it would have been blammed : / Times have changed I suppose, good work!


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JTroubleMBJTroubleMB

Rated 3 / 5 stars

Too much salt...

Good flash, yeah!

but remember...

In Sovietic Russia the Salt eats YOU!!


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MrKidNinja responds:

thanks!
Hmm and your right! sounds like that would burn a bit...