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Im still working on my main flash but i got bored and thought of this so i thought i would animate it!
This is my first flash submission to newgrounds so please point out my flaws.
Too. Little. Animation.
+Good mouth animations.
+Decent voice work.
+Low file size.
-Poor graphical quality (bad drawings, border pop-in).
-Some animation looked tacked-on and unnatural.
-Joke is revealed in the title page.
*Flesh out the plot some more and add more scenes.
*Some fitting music would be nice.
*Work on your drawings and animation techniques.
Also known as, "Sandwich", Too Much Salt tells the tale of a young man who decides to have a sandwich for lunch one day, only to discover that it is much too salty for his liking. That's about it, really, which is a shame, really. I think that if perhaps you worked on building up to the joke and improved some of the drawings, this could be a lot funnier - as it stands now, it isn't very funny at all.
It was expected and yet, somewhat unexpected at the same time....
So therefore, an even 5.
Not too bad
Nice audio work (even compared to more professional flashes on here) and the animation wasn't bad. A bit bland in terms of visuals, though and the absolute lack of a real punch line borders witty and irrelevant. For a first, not bad, just put a bit more in the next one.
Something that I strangely wanted to see in this:
He begins to shrivel up as he says "Too... Much... Salt..."
I think that's just because I'm a child of the cult cartoons like Ren & Stimpy and Invader Zim.
What did my mother always used to say?
Don't put salt in your eye, don't put salt in your eye, put salt in....ALWAYS put salt in your eye!! Lol I like this, it's short and sweet, however if I had have submitted this like 6 years ago when I was into animating, it would have been blammed : / Times have changed I suppose, good work!
Too much salt...
Good flash, yeah!
In Sovietic Russia the Salt eats YOU!!
Hmm and your right! sounds like that would burn a bit...
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a clock day story
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