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Not a Mario spoof. I use koopas and such to channel my comedy into. Not one Mario joke in sight.
Just a little anger I'm venting out about Hollywood creating unoriginal movies and how they probably come up with their ideas. Like Hot Tub Time Machine? WTF
No offense to any Newgrounders about the ending jokes. S'all good fun.
The plot is pretty entertaining.
The voicing was decent, a little unprofessional at points since you were just using computer mics, but it was good enough for this flash. The sound maxing out or having static in the background is distracting.
The single sound track got annoying as well, try changing songs when you change scenes.
The animation was... pretty lame, but whatever, you put more work into the script than anything else. Perhaps spend more time on the background if it is going to be static, or have a looping background to make it more interesting for people (the meeting could have been on a plane?).
The only other glaring mistake that I found abhorrent was the spelling mistakes... That and not writing the subtitles to what was actually said.
Phallic not falac.
Tolkien not Tolken.
Happening not happenning
Negativity not negitivity.
Musician not musicain.
Schneider not Schneiter.
All this could have been caught with some proof reading; spend a half hour and watch your flash a couple times to catch mistakes.
Oh, and you occasionally censored "fuck" without caring that it was being said out loud, and other times completely forgot to censor it. Just inconsistency there, nothing big.
You have some good potential, to make a 4+ flash all you would have to do is spend more time planning your flash, detailing the animation, proofing your subtitles and cleaning up the voices.
Made it in a day. Thanks for the review. Refer to my answer to the comment above you.
Yah it was funny, it was no mario, koopa. Why was Zelda store music playing the whole time though? Kewdos. Tarantino was funny.
HAH! love it
Pretty awesome :) haha i loved the retardation of the main two guys. seriously i bet that's how it is in real life for them though
A story about a dog!
this art teacher is WHACK!!!!
Meeting new people on the first day can be a real gamble.
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