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Shawnee Jenkins' parents eat people and live in the cellar, but that's okay. They're still Mom and Dad.
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The art was amazing, and the story was great, but the narration seemed so rushed that the story didn't really develop so much as tumble along.
you know what this means.
no school! MWAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHA!
I always get a kick out of your stories
First off, huge kudos to making a brand new girl character for this story. The one with the black eyes is creepy cute, but she was getting kinda repetitive.
Excellent narration and story, the relaxed southern belle vocals were a great touch. A lot of the things you added that were minor details really shined for some reason, like how she enjoys milkshakes and the note her mom made her years ago she still packs in her backpack. Everything just felt "right" about the situation, minus the bad luck involved with the parents.
My only issue is, up until the very end the pacing and everything were spot on. Even up to the point where she thought her mother gave her a kiss was great as it's just enough of a hint to get that she was bitten and foreshadow that now she's a vampire too.
But then her parents just leave.
And then the girl smiles at the very end. What?
Everything but the extreme ending of this movie was great, but it did leave a bit of a confused/sour taste in my mouth at the sudden changes out of nowhere with no real explanation. They stayed in the house because that was their original home, they turned into vampires and now it's their lair underground and out of the sun. That works, that's fine. But then they just up and decide to leave? Having one last shred of humanity and wishing to protect their daughter was never mentioned nor hinted at, but I can make the leap and assume that's what happened, only they would not have just up and offed themselves immediately after.
The girl dying from a shove against the wall was a bit iffy to say the least, but I get the constraints of a short story. The problem is its placement at the already mucked up ending made it stand out even more.
Great story, great narration, great animation, great choice of words, but the ending seemed rushed.
It was ok
Good story but probably could of gone without the blood and stuff.
An asinine adventure through the world of high fantasy.
Super villainy at its worst ...
Make Alfred Great Again
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