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Link is on vaction leaving Navi to watch the house,
ALL songs except for the kokiri forest are played by me on my keyboard, i will soon be releasing my album online.
ALL characters are trademarked by nintendo, i dont own them
Ok, its point tally time!
Music.........2 points(Very unique, and good, but pratice makes perfect)
Story...........1 point(would had been funny if you added more actual animation)
graphics.....0 points(Try collaberating with others or using sprites!)
Voice acting/text....0 points(Work ALOT harder on this.)
That's all I have to say.
dont use the thickest brush possible when drawing
Many things you lack.
Work on your voice, your art is ugly, and your flash consists mostly of static images, I'd hardly call this an animation. Take your time and make something good before submitting.
Well, the art was terrible, in order to get better drawings you should pay attention to detail, try and add shading without using a gradient, because when most people use gradients they come out terribly, and use a smaller brush.
The animation itself was great for a first flash, there wasn't any skipping and the lines stayed the same, which is an accomplishment unless you used CS4, which has item based motion.
The joke was overly cliché, and next time you should definitely think about it more, and come up original content, rather than something that's been used a billion times.
The voice acting was terrible. You could barely here his voice, and it was all very mumbly. You should probably get a voice actor next time, or at least a better microphone. There are plenty of voice actors on newgrounds, and I'm sure that you would be able to find one.
Overall, it was decent for your first flash, and I gotta give you a hand for that, because a lot of people start out even worse.
Thank you for telling me what i have done wrong, i know the artwork was crap, the voice is rubbish and everything else was pretty sucky, if someone could tell me weather i should animate with frame by frame or if i should use motion tween.
Can someone help me on making artwork aswell, i am not a very artistic either so if someone could help it would be very appreciated.
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