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Apr 4, 2010 | 10:29 AM EDT

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Its been some time sience ive submited so, enjoy..

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NeverZoneNeverZone

Rated 5 / 5 stars January 15, 2011

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That guy was kinda girly any ways, with the perfume and not. Twas funny when he was takin a showa



XwaynecoltXXwaynecoltX

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars April 4, 2010

Art style was ok

~~REVIEW~~
The art style of this was neat lots of color used, and the character itself was kinda odd, but seemed ok, the story was simple and somewhat funny, and gives a few laughs, as for the character design it was ok like i said but needs more toned down look to it, the humor of this flash was ok could use more joke type of situations though

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
nice animation here, maybe tone down the size of the characters and add more jokes in this

~~OVERALL~~
Entertaining but could use abit more work

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CoopCoop

Rated 3 / 5 stars April 4, 2010

Good joke, but needs work

I think that there's some potential there and you've got a great chance of taking this further with a few minor tweaks to get it working better. Firstly, I'd suggest that you start with the drawing - get the background right and the rest kind of falls into place. You've gone the wrong way with the detail lines - really thick on the moving parts and then really thin on the background parts like the computer.

Try zooming in and using a slightly smaller tool, as it will give you a much better looking work when you zoom back out - this is where cheats come in, especially with backgrounds, since you can reuse them for every frame if the camera angle is the same.

With the moving guy, you've got a few poses that you've sorted out, so more effort with them will make it better, as a better drawn piece looks smoother as they move, for some reason.

With the delivery of the punchline, have a really good looking girl and she offers to play strip poker, then loses horribly and reveals the punchline. With that, you need to stylise the mouth to fit the rest of the face, don't just have an expanding rectangle of pink - tonsils, teeth, tongue and some chin movement are all necessary to develop you as an animator, but you'll find what suits when you try.

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RawnernRawnern

Rated 4 / 5 stars April 4, 2010

FUNNY!

It's funny and the animation was OK, thought.
Good work!


XiruX responds:

Thank you very much! ^_^