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i made this beacuse my last flash vid i did got in the graveyard
so i bet this wont
i agree with him. vvv
it's not bad.
but it certainly could be better.
i loved the music choice, rise against is perfect for a story like this.
make it longer, improve the grammar, and do voiceovers or speech bubbles, and i'll come back, and i'm cerain it will be well worth a five vote and a ten rating.
Short, but well done.
You honestly surprised me greatly. It was well put together, and the art style seemed to help it greatly. I think you have some real potential, but you definately need some practice.
Obviously, longer would be better.
Also, spellcheck would help greatly as well, and for the speech, put it in speech bubbles or go for voiceovers.
I think if you could expand upon this, you could have a real winner, unfortunately, this falls squarely into the average category. Good luck, mate.
make it longer or it will end up in the graveyard...
Sound effects were good, music was appropriate and the minimalist design is common to stick-figure-fighters. On the other hand, the flash lasted less than 50 seconds. If you are earnest about posting your work online and receiving useful criticism, please submit something long enough to judge adequately. Finally, please, please, please, please use spell check and proper punctuation. No one will take you seriously if you don't.
Too short, bad grammar, virtually unentertaining. Not Trying to be mean or anything, but it (in my eyes) was the truth. It was early 2010 though, I'll check out your latest flash.
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